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Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime. Some people think that with better government and law, the problem can be solved, however, others are of the opinion, that nothing can be done.

Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime. Some people think that with better government and law, the problem can be solved, however, others are of the opinion, that nothing can be done. 0nV6O
We are living in an era, post the world war, and although, several peace organizations have been build, the fear of crime has developed among people. To add to this, several terrorist activities, also with the other crimes, have added to this fear. Although, some people believe that there is no way out of this, others are still hopeful. In my opinion, nothing can be done alone, but surely with the combined efforts of people and government, we can improve on it. There are several reasons why people are skeptical of any improvement. Firstly, it is believed that fear is a state of mind which is perpetuated by the media. For example, we are often bombarded with negative news, the moment one opens the television or newspaper, you can find maximum of negative news. Secondly, an opinion has formed that the crime is because of the structural issues in the society which cannot be handled. Like, a person with no food or money is likely to steal. On the other hand, there are even people of the opinion that there is still hope. If only the government can increase the police in local communities and encourage more ‘neighbourhood watch’ schemes, there are chances of improving the situation. Even more, media must also be encouraged to present more positive stories in the news about how crime is being tackled rather than the focus on the negative. Overall, a wide opinion is formed that nothing can be done for the crime rates. However, there are some views that we can improve the situation. In my opinion, we can reduce fear by combined efforts of media, government and individuals.
We are living in an era, post the world war, and although, several peace organizations have been build, the
fear
of
crime
has developed among
people
. To
add
to this, several terrorist activities,
also
with the other
crimes
, have
added
to this
fear
. Although,
some
people
believe that there is no way out of this, others are
still
hopeful. In my
opinion
, nothing can
be done
alone,
but
surely
with the combined efforts of
people
and
government
, we can
improve
on it.

There are several reasons why
people
are skeptical of any improvement.
Firstly
, it
is believed
that
fear
is a state of mind which
is perpetuated
by the media.
For example
, we are
often
bombarded with
negative
news, the moment one opens the television or newspaper, you can find maximum of
negative
news.
Secondly
, an
opinion
has formed that the
crime
is
because
of the structural issues in the society which cannot
be handled
. Like, a person with no food or money is likely to steal.

On the other hand
, there are even
people
of the
opinion
that there is
still
hope. If
only
the
government
can increase the police in local communities and encourage more ‘
neighbourhood
watch
’ schemes, there are chances of improving the situation. Even more, media
must
also
be encouraged
to present more
positive
stories in the news about how
crime
is
being tackled
rather
than the focus on the
negative
.

Overall
, a wide
opinion
is formed
that nothing can
be done
for the
crime
rates.
However
, there are
some
views that we can
improve
the situation. In my
opinion
, we can
reduce
fear
by combined efforts of media,
government
and individuals.
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IELTS essay Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime. Some people think that with better government and law, the problem can be solved, however, others are of the opinion, that nothing can be done.

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4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
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