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Many parents think that it is good to teach children about the value of money .Why do you think it is important to teach them the value of money? In what ways can you help children learn the value of money?

Many parents think that it is good to teach children about the value of money. Why do you think it is important to teach them the value of money? In what ways can you help children learn the value of money? 7gMb
Saving the money is one of the essential parts of today’s society. It is argued that some of adults consider about good opportunity of money valuation knowledge in children education. This essay will highlight the statement that the finance knowledge of youngsters will adapt to the mature life and will provide some methods how to achieve the finance literacy. Firstly, it is known that money plays a vital role in human life. Therefore, the knowledge related money should be implemented at early age for living without any troubles. Furthermore, children teach about fundamental knowledge will help to their parents for planning family budget and, undoubtedly, add a tiny effort for family welfare. Netherland is a prime example, where foundation to the economic is implemented from the secondary school and, according the interview, the teens started to realize the value of money. Turning to second question, the money knowledge should be implemented by various ways, such as subject in the school. The government should involve the necessary subject or create some additional courses for children of secondary schools. Thus, the teenagers will have basic skills for managing the money. Additionally, the children should attend some special organizations and voluntary occasions for realizing how tricky to gain the money and when one plays an essential role in life. For instance, the survey carried out in one of the developed countries showed that the children were involved in fundraising organizations, more likely responsible for money valuation. To draw the conclusion, education related money education is necessary for improving the life conditions of mature life. Also, the government should give the opportunity to learn the financial base at secondary school. Moreover, parents will organize the additional activities for pupils for realize the money importance.
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money
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today
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some of adults
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good
opportunity of
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money
valuation
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knowledge
in
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children
education. This essay will highlight the statement that the finance
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knowledge
of youngsters will adapt to the mature
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life
and will provide
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some
methods how to achieve the finance literacy.

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, it
is known
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money
plays a vital role in human
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life
.
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, the
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knowledge
related
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money
should
be implemented
at early age for living without any troubles.
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,
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children
teach about fundamental
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knowledge
will
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help
to their parents for planning family budget and,
undoubtedly
,
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add
a tiny effort for family welfare.
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Netherland
is a prime example, where foundation to the economic
is implemented
from the secondary
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school
and, according the interview, the teens
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started
to realize the value of money.

Turning to second question, the
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money
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knowledge
should
be implemented
by various ways, such as subject in the
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school
. The
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government
should involve the necessary subject or create
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some
additional courses for
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children
of secondary
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schools
.
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, the
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teenagers
will have basic
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skills
for managing the
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money
.
Additionally
, the
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children
should attend
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some
special organizations and voluntary occasions for realizing how tricky to gain the
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money
and when one plays an essential role in
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life
.
For instance
, the survey carried out in one of the
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developed countries
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showed
that the
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children
were involved
in fundraising organizations, more likely responsible for
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money
valuation.

To draw the conclusion, education related
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money
education is necessary for improving the
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life
conditions of mature
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life
.
Also
, the
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government
should give the opportunity to learn the financial base at secondary
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school
.
Moreover
, parents will organize the additional activities for pupils for realize the
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money
importance.
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IELTS essay Many parents think that it is good to teach children about the value of money. Why do you think it is important to teach them the value of money? In what ways can you help children learn the value of money?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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