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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages? G0VB
Museums are one of the places where people get to know about history. In some places to visit the museum, there are tickets which people have to buy. Whereas, some people believe that it should be free of cost. On the one hand, there are several benefits. If people put charges for visit museum it can be a source of income and which can be used for maintenance. Every museum must look nice and it is obvious to say that if the monuments are maintained till that time people are coming to see Museum. for example, in India, there is plenty of museum which represent our culture and history. Even from foreign countries people especially come to see our galleries. recently the museum of the Statue of Unity has been made by the government of India in the state which is known as Gujarat. so that people should know about those people who participated in making our India proud and independent. Secondly, we can provide more facilities. which will attract more tourists because as much as people start coming to see the museums we should be needed to stick and good security rules for the look after of museums. as we aware that every monument from the past is so much expensive so as we need great security staff because in tons of people come to see the museum, as a result, it also helps some people to get a job and income for instance In the red fort there is a museum for that our government applied tight security so that any outsider can not harm anyone or anything On the other hand, there are some drawbacks also if we apply a fee for the visit museum. it is commonly seen that some people are interested to go to the museum for research but they can not afford the fee through their monthly income such as the people who are under the poverty line who hardly get a one time meal but they have a lot dream. To sum up, in this situation there are some merits and demerits but we can not ignore that it necessary to apply for admission fees for the visit any museum because of demerits we have a lot of alternative solution
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, there are tickets which
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believe that it should be free of cost.

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people
put charges for
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visit
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museum
it can be a source of income and which can be
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used
for maintenance. Every
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museum
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must
look nice and it is obvious to say that if the monuments
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people
are coming to
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Museum
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example, in India, there is
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which represent our culture and history. Even from foreign countries
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especially
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to
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our galleries.
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recently
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museum
of the Statue of Unity has
been made
by the
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government
of India in the state which
is known
as Gujarat.
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so
that
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people
should know about those
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people
who participated in making our India proud and independent.

Secondly
, we can provide more facilities.
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which
will attract more tourists
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because
as much as
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people
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start
coming to
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see
the
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we should
be needed
to stick and
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good
security
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rules
for the look after of
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museums
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as
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we aware
that every monument from the past is
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much expensive
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as we need great security staff
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in tons of
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people
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come
to
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the
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,
as a result
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also
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helps
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some
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people
to
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get
a job and income
for instance
In the red fort there is a
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museum
for that our
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government
applied tight security
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so
that any outsider can not harm anyone or anything

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, there are
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drawbacks
also
if we apply a fee for the
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museum
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people
are interested
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museum
for research
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they can not afford the fee through their monthly income such as the
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people
who are under the poverty line who hardly
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get
a one time meal
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but
they have a lot dream.

To sum up, in this situation there are
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merits and demerits
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we can not
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necessary to apply for admission fees for the
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any
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museum
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alternative solution
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IELTS essay Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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  American English
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