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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal.some people, however, think that other type of progress are equaly important for a country

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other type of progress are equaly important for a country MPwL
It may consider by many governments that, financial growth is the main paramount targeted zone in their legislation. where as, it is oftenly argued by some people that, nevertheless, there are also other sectors, which intend to be concentrate and put industrious to obtain improvements. First, it is a true fact that, government provide more concentration and harwork to reach a great strength in the economical area. Because, money plays a significant role in the development of the country. Moreover, they oftenly pursue a strict legislation to put an advantage in the financial department. Subsequently, the authorities vigorously advance the improvements and substantialy make a convenient way to strengthen their economy. Additionaly, value of money is one of the most inevitable property in the terittory. As well as, it eradicate all the detrimental problems, which was encountered by the nation from other countries. A good illustration for this is, tremendous growth in the finance sector keeps a pertinent way of silent from all the pitfall danger from other regions. Apart from that, it mainly belived some people that, there are plethora of other sectors also intend to obtain advantage, which are imperative for the future of the nation. For instance, a better education level for all people, that will be lead to an extremely powerful youth. As a result, it will mitigate the lack of knowledge and communication barrier. Consequently, it stimulate the young people to reach a high level of carrer, which was merely a positive movement for discover some future scinetists. For example, one of my friend gain good awareness in the science subject by the government, who provide a better taught. There after, he will famous as an young future scientist in the chemistry field. In conclusion, a great economy strength adavantage for the nation. In my opinion, additionaly also plan to provide more importance in other areas because that may lead to find some famous indiviguals in the future.
It may consider by
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that, financial growth is the main
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paramount targeted
zone in their legislation.
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where as
, it is
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oftenly
argued by
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some
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people
that,
nevertheless
, there are
also
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other
sectors, which intend to be concentrate and put industrious to obtain improvements.

First
, it is a true fact that,
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government
provide more concentration and
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harwork
to reach a great strength in the economical area.
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Because
, money plays a significant role in the development of the country.
Moreover
, they
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oftenly
pursue a strict legislation to put an advantage in the financial department.
Subsequently
, the authorities
vigorously
advance the improvements and
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substantialy
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make
a convenient way to strengthen their economy.
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Additionaly
, value of money is one of the most inevitable
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property
in the
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terittory
.
As well
as, it
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eradicate
all the detrimental problems, which
was encountered
by the nation from
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other
countries. A
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good
illustration for this is, tremendous growth in the finance sector
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keeps
a pertinent way of silent from all the pitfall
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danger
from
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other
regions.

Apart from that, it
mainly
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belived
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some
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people
that, there are plethora of
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other
sectors
also
intend to obtain advantage, which are imperative for the
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future
of the nation.
For instance
, a better education level for all
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people
, that will be lead to an
extremely
powerful youth.
As a result
, it will mitigate the lack of knowledge and communication barrier.
Consequently
, it
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stimulate
the young
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people
to reach a high level of
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carrer
, which was
merely
a
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positive
movement for discover
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some
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future
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scinetists
.
For example
, one of my friend gain
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good
awareness in the science subject by the
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government
, who provide a better taught.
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There after
, he will
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famous
as
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an
young
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future
scientist in the chemistry field.

In conclusion
, a great economy strength
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adavantage
for the nation. In my opinion,
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additionaly
also
plan to provide more importance in
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other
areas
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because
that may lead to find
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some
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famous
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indiviguals
in the
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future
.
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other type of progress are equaly important for a country

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6.0
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