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Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them.

Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. XoKJO
Some have suggested that the protection of wild animals should be selective. In my opinion, humanity has responsibility for all wild animals, though it is occasionally justified to divert resources towards more valuable species. Those in favor of safeguarding certain wild animals argue the circumstantial factors. These factors can range from the threat the specific animals face to the value of the animal itself. For instance, tigers are an endangered wild animal and require intensive conservation efforts compared with animals such as rats and pigeons, which have adapted skillfully to urban environments. Most would admit that there is little logic in providing equal support to species in different circumstances. A more extreme critic could add that some animals are more deserving of preservation. The tiger, to continue the previous example, is greatly valued for its elegance. Other animals, such as bees, are valuable not for their beauty but their usefulness to humanity. However, all animals should be protected as humanity has been the catalyst for their endangerment. Before the rapid industrialization and surging populations of the last several hundred years, humans and animals lived on relatively equal terms and shared the Earth. Since human development has outpaced nature and now threatens the habitats of countless species, mankind must enact safeguards for all animals. Without such forward-looking protections, there is likely to be a “domino effect” as species die out and impair fragile ecosystems globally. Therefore even if an animal is not on the verge of extinction, it might be important to maintain its population levels so as to not start a cycle of irreversible harm. In conclusion, humans should endeavor to protect as many animals as possible although there are exceptional cases where some species may be prioritized. Governments and individuals should collaborate to ensure wild animals are not unduly threatened by human progress.
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have suggested that the protection of wild
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animals
should be selective. In my opinion, humanity has responsibility for all wild
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animals
, though it is
occasionally
justified to divert resources towards more valuable species.

Those in favor of safeguarding certain wild
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animals
argue the circumstantial factors. These factors can range from the threat the specific
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animals
face to the value of the
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animal
itself.
For instance
, tigers are an endangered wild
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animal
and require intensive conservation efforts compared with
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animals
such as rats and pigeons, which have adapted
skillfully
to urban environments. Most would admit that there is
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little
logic in providing equal support to species in
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different
circumstances. A more extreme critic could
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add
that
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some
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animals
are more deserving of preservation. The tiger, to continue the previous example, is
greatly
valued for its elegance. Other
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animals
, such as bees, are valuable not for their beauty
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but
their usefulness to humanity.

However
, all
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animals
should
be protected
as humanity has been the catalyst for their endangerment.
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Before
the rapid industrialization and surging populations of the last several hundred years,
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humans
and
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animals
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lived
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relatively
equal terms and shared the Earth. Since
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human
development has outpaced nature and
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now
threatens the habitats of countless species, mankind
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must
enact safeguards for all
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animals
. Without such forward-looking protections, there is likely to be a “domino effect” as species
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die
out and impair fragile ecosystems globally.
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Therefore
even if an
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animal
is not on the verge of extinction, it might be
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important
to maintain its population levels
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so as to
not
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start
a cycle of irreversible harm.

In conclusion
,
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humans
should endeavor to protect as
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many
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animals
as possible although there are exceptional cases where
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some
species may
be prioritized
.
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Governments
and individuals should collaborate to ensure wild
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animals
are not
unduly
threatened by
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human
progress.
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IELTS essay Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them.

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4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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