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some people think that business and culture between other countries is good while other think that it is bad disuss both views and give your opioins.

some people think that business and culture between other countries is good while other think that it is bad disuss both views and give your opioins. g83Ka
One of the debatable concept of todays world relationship between other countries is increasing day by day. Bunch of personage that escalating trade and civilization among other nations offer productivity is a just argument, howbeit there are some who express disagreement to it and buttress that its totally vanish the national identity. In the disquisition, I will explicate both stance before presenting my consensus to former view. The crusaders of graving occupation and lifestyle between other states puts beneficial impact. The express other support with valid grounds. The simplest exposition can be relation with other territory play vital role in countries along with its give profit with insist of other states. To elaborate further, this will not only learn multitude things but also sale the products across the globe to earn handsome money to gain profit equally `in every land. The best example of this scenario, it was mentioned in the famous newspaper in which a number of experts reveal that nine out of ten nations economy boost up because of the connectivity. Hence, the percentage of work and tradition reach to the peak point in each and every land. Reasoning from other side, partisans of link among other states puts adverse impact proffer plentiful reasons to depicts their prospectus. In the first place people follow western lifestyle and profession which demolish the national identity as they easily adopt it also. Last but not least masses entice towards other land beauty and customs, they do not have much information about the identity and merely focus on other states instead other own nations. so, country symbol will be drop down day by day. Altogether, the elucidation above show why connection among other land which lessen the selfhood while trading. It is apparent from the discussed points that both the views have their own clarification which create altercation. I; however, am predisposed with linking between other countries is extremely conducive for country and have spelled out the causes for the same in above paragraphs.
One of the debatable concept of
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world relationship between
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countries
is increasing day by day.
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that escalating trade and civilization among
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other
nations offer productivity is a
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argument, howbeit there are
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some
who express disagreement to it and buttress that its
totally
vanish the national identity. In the disquisition, I will explicate both stance
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before
presenting my consensus to former view.

The crusaders of graving occupation and lifestyle between
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other
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states
puts beneficial impact. The express
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other
support with valid grounds.
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The
simplest exposition can be relation with
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other
territory play vital role in
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countries
along with its give profit with insist of
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other
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states
. To elaborate
further
, this will not
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only
learn multitude things
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but
also
sale the products across the globe to earn handsome money to gain profit
equally
`in every land. The best example of this scenario, it
was mentioned
in the
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famous
newspaper in which a number of experts reveal that nine out of ten nations economy boost up
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because
of the connectivity.
Hence
, the percentage of work and tradition reach to the peak point in each and every land.

Reasoning from
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other
side, partisans of link among
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other
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states
puts adverse impact proffer plentiful reasons to depicts their prospectus. In the
first
place
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people
follow western lifestyle and profession which demolish the national identity as they
easily
adopt it
also
. Last
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but
not
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least
masses entice towards
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land beauty and customs, they do not have much information about the identity and
merely
focus on
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other
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states
instead
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other
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own
nations.
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so
,
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country
symbol will be
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drop down
day by day. Altogether, the elucidation above
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show
why connection among
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other
land which lessen the selfhood while trading.

It is apparent from the discussed points that both the views have their
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own
clarification which create altercation. I;
however
,
am predisposed
with linking between
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other
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countries
is
extremely
conducive for
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country
and have spelled out the causes for the same in above paragraphs.
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IELTS essay some people think that business and culture between other countries is good while other think that it is bad disuss both views and give your opioins.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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