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Manufacturing tea, two different way

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On the picture we can see two ways tea is produced. Each way includes four steps. Both of its started from picking fresh tea leaves. On this step only bug and two top leaves is picked for good quality tea. Second step is named withering, where leaves lost 60% moisture by passing air throw them on rack. Then process of tea’s manufacturing goes by different ways due to types of methods. First method is traditional, which prepared loose tea. There are after being withered leaves are rolled flat and broken. By this method enzymes are released from leaves. Another method to prepared tea is modern, when leaves are cut, torn and curled. This quick process called cutting, by which smaller granular pieces is created. Traditional and modern methods include oxidation and fermentation steps. This means that rolled leaves is spread on tiles and cement. Here leaves change to copper colour by enzymes and air impacts. In finish leaves is fired or dried on oven or hot air dryers, where its lost 97% moisture out. Finally we get aroma and flavour tea is released. Manufacturing tea
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steps
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tea
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leaves
. On this
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only
bug and two top
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leaves
is picked
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good
quality
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tea
. Second
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step
is named
withering, where
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leaves
lost 60% moisture by passing air throw them on rack.

Then process of
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tea’s
manufacturing goes by
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different
ways due to types of methods.

First
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method
is traditional, which prepared loose
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tea
. There are after
being withered
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leaves
are rolled
flat and broken. By this
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method
enzymes
are released
from
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leaves
.

Another
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to prepared
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tea
is modern, when
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leaves
are
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, torn and curled. This quick process called cutting, by which smaller granular pieces
is created
.

Traditional and modern
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methods
include oxidation and fermentation
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steps
. This means that rolled
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leaves
is spread
on tiles and cement. Here
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leaves
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change
to copper
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colour
by enzymes and air impacts.

In finish
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leaves
is fired
or dried on oven or hot air dryers, where its lost 97% moisture out.

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Finally
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aroma and
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flavour
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tea
is released
. Manufacturing
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tea
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IELTS essay Manufacturing tea, two different way

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
184 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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