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level of crime is increasing & crime becomes more violent? what do you think & what can be done.

Crime has reached to its peak whether country is developed or under developed, it is matter of concern as daily newspapers, other communication Medias are full with these kind of news. This passage aims on rising crime rate as it is becoming more harsh these days & some measures to reduce its impact. Crime is attaining its peak due to major factors. First factor is unemployment, it is prime factor because lot of young aspiring minds that have knowledge and efficiency to do great things but didn’t have proper platform/job in hand. The intention of earning money leads them to follow wrong paths which in turn make them criminals. Second factor is misguidance; it may be due to political parties, movies, terrorist groups etc. many a times political parties give favour to such kind of activities to divert public interest on certain issues or to win in elections. Terrorist groups insert so much nefarious things by misguiding young minds, even they didn’t think once to sacrifice their lives for the “purpose” that has been feeded in their minds. Also there are various movies, criminal shows that insist many people to act same to earn money, fame or revenge from anyone.

Crime has reached to its peak whether country is developed
 or This is normally spelled as one word.underdeveloped
under developed
, it is matter of concern as daily newspapers, other communication Medias are The usual collocation for “full” is “of”, not “with”. Did you mean “full of”?full of
full with
‘These’ does not seem to match the singular noun ‘kind’. Did you mean “this kind” or “these kinds”?this kindthese kinds
these kind
 of news. This passage The usual collocation for “aims” is “at”, not “on”. Did you mean “aims at”?aims at
aims on
 rising crime rate as it is becoming more harsh these days & This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 measures to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
 its impact.

Crime is attaining its peak due to major You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcircumstanceinfluencepointcomponentelementthing
factors
. First
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcircumstanceinfluencepointcomponentelementthing
factor
 is unemployment, it is prime You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcircumstanceinfluencepointcomponentelementthing
factor
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
It seems that an article is missing.a lot of
lot of
 young aspiring minds that have knowledge and efficiency to do great things This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 didn’t have proper platform/job in hand. The intention of earning money leads them to follow This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
wrong
 paths which in turn This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 them criminals.

Second You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcircumstanceinfluencepointcomponentelementthing
factor
 is misguidance; it may be due to political parties, movies, terrorist groups etc. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 a times political parties give Possible spelling mistake. ‘favour’ is British English.favor
favour
 to such kind of activities to divert public interest on certain issues or to win in elections. Terrorist groups insert This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 much nefarious things by misguiding young minds, even they didn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 once to sacrifice their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 for the “purpose” that has been Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean “fed”, the past tense form of the verb ‘feed’?fedneededfeederseededfeudeddeeded
feeded
 in their minds. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 there are various movies, criminal This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that insist This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 to act same to earn money, fame or revenge from anyone. 