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Letter to a friend recommending a restaurant for a family celebration In your letter you should tell where it is how you know it why you recommend this restaurant v.1

Letter to a friend recommending a restaurant for a family celebration In your letter you should tell where it is how you know it why you recommend this restaurant v. 1
Technology development provides students with the opportunity to get a university or college degree through online courses. Distance learning has benefits, but there will also be drawbacks. One evident benefit of learning online is that students are given the chance of educating with minimum cost. For example, the cost of transportation in order to attend in classes has been excluded in online courses. As a result, more people throughout the world are able to educate. Also, schools and universities are not required to allocate different places to traditional classes in various times. Because the online classes are held once of which all of students can take advantage at any location and time. Another benefit of online training is that students are totally free to have their own schedule based on their favourite time to learn and match it to other activities. Online education brings with different benefits. However, this suffers from some demerits, including lack of socialization and making friends. To illustrate, in traditional class team working is possible in which students share their ideas and make useful contributions to discussions in classes, face to face, which is improving their skill of socializing. But the relationships in online courses are just virtual. Also, due to being in the same location for a specific time during traditional classes, there is a chance of being introduced to new people and making new friendships, which is happening rarely in online courses. In conclusion, although there are both advantages and disadvantages of online education, I think that this way of learning should be more popular, because it extends the possibility of learning for everyone with the minimum cost. If there will be more online schooling, more people will be educated.
Technology development provides
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students
with the opportunity to
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get
a university or college degree through
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online
courses. Distance
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learning
has
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benefits
,
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but
there will
also
be drawbacks.

One evident
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benefit
of
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learning
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online
is that
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students
are
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given
the chance of educating with minimum cost.
For example
, the cost of transportation in order to attend in
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classes
has
been excluded
in
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online
courses.
As a result
, more
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people
throughout the world are able to educate.
Also
, schools and universities are not required to allocate
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different
places to traditional
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classes
in various
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times
.
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Because
the
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online
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classes
are held
once of which all of
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students
can take advantage at any location and
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time
. Another
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benefit
of
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online
training is that
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students
are
totally
free to have their
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own
schedule based on their
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favourite
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time
to learn and match it to other activities.

Online education brings with
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different
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benefits
.
However
, this suffers from
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some
demerits, including lack of socialization and making friends. To illustrate, in traditional
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class
team working is possible in which
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students
share their
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ideas
and
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make
useful contributions to discussions in
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classes
, face to face, which is improving their
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skill
of socializing.
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But
the relationships in
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online
courses are
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just
virtual.
Also
, due to being in the same location for a specific
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time
during traditional
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classes
, there is a chance of
being introduced
to new
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people
and making new friendships, which is happening rarely in
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online
courses.

In conclusion
, although there are both advantages and disadvantages of
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online
education, I
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think
that this way of
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learning
should be more popular,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it extends the possibility of
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learning
for everyone with the minimum cost. If there will be more
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online
schooling, more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
be educated
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Letter to a friend recommending a restaurant for a family celebration In your letter you should tell where it is how you know it why you recommend this restaurant v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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