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Leisure time spent by men and women according to emploment status

Leisure time spent by men and women according to emploment status 7abXY
The amount of time spent by men and women of differentemployment status were provided bellow. In general, the data form both sex showed unemployed and retired groups enjoy their leisure time more than others. Men without job either unemployed or retired used about 85 hours per week to enjoy their leisure time which is 35 hours higher than men with full time job. Similar pattern also found in women which is jobless women use about 75 hours per weeks for relaxation, which is 20, 35 and 37 hours higher than housewives, part time and full time employee respectively. Additionally, the data also showed that all part time employees were women. In conclusion, the amount of time used by men or women to satisfy themself depend on employment status. High work rate has consequences in less time available for relaxation
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and
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differentemployment
status

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were
provided bellow.
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, the data form both
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sex


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showed
unemployed and retired

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groups
enjoy their leisure
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time
more than others.
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Men
without job either unemployed or retired
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used
about 85
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hours
per week to enjoy their leisure
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time
which is 35
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hours
higher than
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men
with full
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job. Similar
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pattern


also
found in
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women
which is jobless women

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use
about 75
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hours
per weeks for relaxation, which is 20, 35 and 37
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higher than housewives, part
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and full
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employee
respectively
.
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, the data
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that all part
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employees were
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women
.
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, the amount of
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used
by
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or
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women
to satisfy
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themself
depend on employment status. High work rate has consequences in less
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time
available for
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relaxation
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IELTS essay Leisure time spent by men and women according to emploment status

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
138 words
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