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Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money.

Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money. 56deD
It is true that managing finance is one of the most important aspects that every adult should be able to do. As far as I am concerned, I believe there are a lot of ways to learn controlling the budget. The first way to learn to manage finance is setting priorities. People should save money for necessary things and only after that buy what they want. For example, at first household utilities have to be paid by people (electricity, water and gas). Moreover, people should not forget about food. Every day we buy food and we always should have money for it. After that, people would buy the least less important things such as clothes, entertainments, travels etc. This way, people should have a list of necessary things for life. Nowadays it is a serious question how to control finance for adults and there are a lot of lessons about money management. The younger generation can go to these classes to be able to spend money right in the future. Moreover, such courses are often visited by some adults. Now there are a lot of specialists in this field who can teach you how to manage money due to the fact that it is a very common problem among many people. As a result, people can be taught how to properly manage money by taking courses with experts. In conclusion, it seems to me that the ability to manage money is likely to help people in adult life. (248)
It is true that managing finance is one of the most
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important
aspects that every adult should be able to do. As far as I
am concerned
, I believe there are
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a lot of
ways to learn
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controlling
the budget.

The
first
way to learn to
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manage
finance is setting priorities.
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People
should save
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money
for necessary things and
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only
after that
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buy
what they want.
For example
, at
first
household utilities
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have to
be paid
by
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people
(electricity, water and gas).
Moreover
,
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people
should not forget about food. Every day we
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buy
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food and
we always should have
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money
for it. After that,
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people
would
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buy
the
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least less
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important
things such as clothes, entertainments, travels etc. This way,
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people
should have a list of necessary things for life.

Nowadays it is a serious question how to control finance for
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adults
and there are
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a lot of
lessons about
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money
management. The younger generation can go to these classes to be able to spend
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money
right in the future.
Moreover
, such courses are
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often
visited by
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some
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adults
.
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Now
there are
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a lot of
specialists in this field who can teach you how to
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manage
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money
due to the fact that it is a
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very
common problem among
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many
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people
.
As a result
,
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people
can
be taught
how to
properly
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manage
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money
by taking courses with experts.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that the ability to
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manage
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money
is likely to
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help
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people
in adult life. (248)
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IELTS essay Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life. How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money.

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248 words
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