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Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

More experienced personnel is getting majority of decision making process jobs in a corporation, while generally people think younger and current generation leader will be much better. In this essay I will strongly agree with this statement. Firstly I will explore the advantages of a fresh graduate and secondly, I will discuss adaptiveness of certain individuals in leadership decisions. Overall, the number of experienced employees in an industry determine whether a company is successful or not. Although, comparing Ford in contrast to Tesla, the latter is earning ten folds as their leadership involves Elon musk (younger entrepreneur). In addition to this, a fresh graduate in a certain field can give rise to new perspectives and ideas that seem less known to experienced generation of people doing same work every day. Furthermore, there is reluctance in some sectors to get evolved and practice new sets of parameters or ideas for experienced people. On the other hand, a young mindset looks for changes and adapts to new sets of rules quickly, therefore, helping the industry thrive. A great example is Nokia which gained more than 50% market share of mobile phones sold worldwide but could not keep up with the dynamic of changing technologies. In conclusion, experienced and older people could be of help in the stages where operational deficiencies are there where as top level managers and leaders should involve younger and adjustable resources.
More
experienced
personnel is getting majority of decision making process jobs in a corporation, while
generally
people
think
younger and
current
generation leader will be much better. In this essay I will
strongly
agree
with this statement.
Firstly
I will explore the advantages of a fresh graduate and
secondly
, I will discuss adaptiveness of certain individuals in leadership decisions.

Overall
, the number of
experienced
employees in an industry determine whether a
company
is successful or not. Although, comparing Ford
in contrast
to Tesla, the latter is earning ten folds as their leadership involves Elon musk (younger entrepreneur).
In addition
to this, a fresh graduate in a certain field can give rise to new perspectives and
ideas
that seem less known to
experienced
generation of
people
doing same work every day.

Furthermore
, there is reluctance in
some
sectors to
get
evolved and practice new sets of parameters or
ideas
for
experienced
people
.
On the other hand
, a young mindset looks for
changes
and adapts to new sets of
rules
quickly
,
therefore
, helping the industry thrive. A great example is Nokia which gained more than 50% market share of mobile phones sold worldwide
but
could not
keep
up with the dynamic of changing technologies.

In conclusion
,
experienced
and older
people
could be of
help
in the stages where operational deficiencies are there where as top level managers and leaders should involve younger and adjustable resources.
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IELTS essay Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better.

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