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LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN ALL ORGANIZATIONS ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNGER LEADER WOULD BE BETTER. AGREE OR DISAGREE v.2

LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN ALL ORGANIZATIONS ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNGER LEADER WOULD BE BETTER. AGREE OR DISAGREE v. 2
It is often argued that younger leaders would be better while leaders and directors in all organizations are normally older people. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that younger people cannot be leader and succeed as it do older people for two reasons, which the following essay will explore. First and Foremost, I believe that proficiency and knowledge are being gained due to hard and consistent work during years. Consequently I think that young people, instead of becoming leaders at once, must first work on improving their skills and gain experience for becoming qualified specialists, as well as widen their horizons and expand their knowledge. They need a lot of years to work hard to fulfill this purpose. Without these skills and knowledge they cannot succeed as leaders of organizations, inasmuch as due to the lack of experience they can make a lot of frequent mistakes, which in it’s turn can affect adversely on the future of these organizations and bring them to bankruptcy. Anyway, when it comes to older leaders, we should attack an attentions to the fact that in most circumstances they have already gained necessary skills and knowledge in the walks of their lives and they are ready to become successful leaders with making right decisions and running organizations fairly well. Therefore, this is an argument that we cannot put aside in my point of view. Secondly, I think that the current age of the leader has a significant importance for creating equilibrium within company and building balanced relationship with other workers. As a matter of fact, almost all organizations have both young and older employees and I think older workers will not manage to work productively and effective, always having in mind, that it is unfair, while having more skills they are anyhow inferior to a younger leader. This will have an absolutely negative impact on them in my opinion. For example, I have a friend who was a superintendant in a large company when he was 28 years old. He was certain that he would manage to succeed and he was sure he would be able to gain knowledge and skills by years. But he failed as he hadn’t enough experience of running large company in different challenging and hard situations. Moreover, he failed to build good relations with employees. That’s why I thing that young people are not ready to become good leaders of organizations and during their young ages they would rather work as an ordinary employees, gaining skills and knowledge from their older supervisers in order to become future leaders.
It is
often
argued that younger
leaders
would be better while
leaders
and directors in all
organizations
are
normally
older
people
. I completely disagree with this opinion and
think
that younger
people
cannot be
leader
and succeed as it do
older
people
for two reasons, which the following essay will explore.

First
and Foremost, I believe that proficiency and
knowledge
are
being gained
due to
hard
and consistent
work
during years.
Consequently
I
think
that
young
people
,
instead
of becoming
leaders
at once,
must
first
work
on improving their
skills
and gain experience for becoming qualified specialists,
as well
as widen their horizons and expand their
knowledge
. They need
a lot of
years to
work
hard
to fulfill this purpose. Without these
skills
and
knowledge
they cannot succeed as
leaders
of
organizations
, inasmuch as due to the lack of experience they can
make
a lot of
frequent mistakes, which in
it’s
turn can affect
adversely
on the future of these
organizations
and bring them to bankruptcy. Anyway, when it
comes
to
older
leaders
, we should attack
an attentions
to the fact that in most circumstances they have already gained necessary
skills
and
knowledge
in the walks of their
lives and
they are ready to become successful
leaders
with making right decisions and running
organizations
fairly
well.
Therefore
, this is an argument that we cannot put aside in my point of view.

Secondly
, I
think
that the
current
age of the
leader
has a significant importance for creating equilibrium within
company
and building balanced relationship with other workers. As a matter of fact, almost all
organizations
have both
young
and
older
employees and I
think
older
workers will not manage to
work
productively
and effective, always having in mind, that it is unfair, while having more
skills
they are anyhow inferior to a younger
leader
. This will have an
absolutely
negative
impact on them in my opinion.

For example
, I have a friend who was a
superintendant
in a large
company
when he was 28 years
old
. He was certain that he would manage to
succeed and
he was sure he would be able to gain
knowledge
and
skills
by years.
But
he failed as he hadn’t
enough
experience of running large
company
in
different
challenging and
hard
situations.
Moreover
, he failed to build
good
relations with employees.

That’s why I
thing
that
young
people
are not ready to become
good
leaders
of
organizations
and during their
young
ages they would
rather
work
as an ordinary
employees
, gaining
skills
and
knowledge
from their
older
supervisers
in order to become future
leaders
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN ALL ORGANIZATIONS ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNGER LEADER WOULD BE BETTER. AGREE OR DISAGREE v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
430 words
5.5
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