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lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance

Issues show us that there is a global problem of fresh water stress. Pure water being used more and more in the last two centuries due to increasing the majority of industrial companies and fabrics, also it depends to climate change. Water shortage is the main problem in African and Asian countries, according to this some people donate a lot of money to help them. Nowadays people make informed decisions to save water, for example famous brands have option as clothes recycling. In addition you also have an opportunity to buy clothes, bags and shoes made from recycled materials. Scientists could develop effective ways for producing fresh water and waste-water treatment. Because lack of fresh water could lead to war between countries, various form of diseases and natural disasters.
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stress
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being
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companies
and fabrics,
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shortage is the main problem in African and Asian countries, according to this
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them. Nowadays
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people
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informed decisions to save
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famous
brands have option as clothes recycling. In
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clothes, bags and shoes made from recycled materials. Scientists could develop effective ways for producing fresh
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water
and waste-water treatment.
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lack of fresh
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could lead to war between countries, various form of diseases and natural disasters.

IELTS essay lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
129 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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