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Keeping pets good or unhealthy and dangerous.

Keeping pets good or unhealthy and dangerous. Vy1Jw
It is argued that keeping pets for children is a good idea while others think this is dangerous and unhealthy. This essay agrees that keeping pets is a better option. Firstly, keeping pets teach children to respect animals. It teaches them to treat animals as living beings, as they like other life on earth need protection, love and care. For example, my colony has been running a welfare shelter for lost and abused animals since the last 15 years. They often take up volunteers from schools and children often learn to show empathy and also treat animals on humane grounds. Secondly, animals are both loyal and make great companions, a reason to return home to, as pet animals display love and care towards their owners. Also many people keep them to safegaurd their property, as they are both fierce and protective. For instance, many families in my country have pet dogs, they are preferred over others as they are protective of their owners. To conclude, keeping pets teaches empat6and inculcate responsibility towards other species.
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for children is a
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while others
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and unhealthy. This essay
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that keeping
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is a better option.

Firstly
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teach children to respect
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animals
. It teaches them to treat
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animals
as living beings, as they like
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other
life on earth need protection,
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love
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, my colony has been running a welfare shelter for lost and abused
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animals
since the last 15 years. They
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take up volunteers from schools and children
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learn to
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show
empathy and
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treat
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animals
on humane grounds.

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,
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animals
are both loyal and
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make
great companions, a reason to return home to, as pet
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animals
display
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love
and care towards their owners.
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Also
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many
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people
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safegaurd
their property, as they are both fierce and protective.
For instance
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many
families in my country have pet dogs, they
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over others as they are protective of their owners.
To conclude
, keeping
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pets
teaches empat6and inculcate responsibility towards
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other
species.

IELTS essay Keeping pets good or unhealthy and dangerous.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
174 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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