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Jobs was the illegitimate son of an American mother and Muslim father.

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Jobs was the illegitimate son of an American mother and Muslim father. He was born when his mother was still a student. As a result, Jobs had to endure the pain of not being with his parents since he was a child and at the same time suffered from everyone's criticism of him. But later, Jobs turned an ordinary garage into a successful international company with his effort and talent. Steve once said he would always live like today was his last and he did it. Therefore, Steve Jobs changed lives, redefined industries and achieved one of the rarest things in human history, it has changed the way we saw the world. To sum up, Steve Jobs was the CEO of Apple and was one of the most influential, successful people in the technology industry in Silicon Valley in the late 90s.

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