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It seems that many companies today are becoming much more concerned with profit than with the happiness of their workers.

It seems that many companies today are becoming much more concerned with profit than with the happiness of their workers. Nmn9W
Currently, most of the companies are developing and constructive with employees and staff members. It is a vital role for the company to look after workers and also the infrastructure and environment of the work place. This essay will illustrate about how to better take care of workers by companies in future. First of all, all workers or employees should be treat as a family member as well as take care. Secondly, to make the family member happy and motivational some percentage of annual profit should be distributed among the workers as an annual bonus and also provide holidays with the certain time interval so that employees can be relaxed from daily schedule. The success of each company depends on how the employees and staff members are treated. Thirdly, looking towards current scenario younger generation are more found of events and activity. So company should organize events such as fun n fare event, religious activity etc. Company should reward their employers by certificate of trophy. Moreover, there are some positive accepts such as, company provides a good training facilities to enrolled members. Through which they get knowledge about work experience. Employees are the backbone of the company, if it does not work parallelly company may suffer economy crisis due to irregular coordination and insufficient fluency of work process. Sometime fault is not only of company but also of employers such as inefficient knowledge and irregular to the work. In my opinion, company should work fluently with employees and treat their workers with respectful manner and keeping them happy would eventually lead to success and business success.
Currently
, most of the
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companies
are developing and constructive with
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employees
and staff
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members
. It is a vital role for the
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company
to look after
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workers
and
also
the infrastructure and environment of the
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work
place. This essay will illustrate about how to better take care of
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workers
by
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companies
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in future
.

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First of all
, all
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workers
or
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employees
should be
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treat
as a family
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member
as well
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Secondly
, to
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make
the family
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member
happy and motivational
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some
percentage of annual profit should
be distributed
among the
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workers
as an annual bonus and
also
provide holidays with the certain time interval
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so
that
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employees
can
be relaxed
from daily schedule. The success of each
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company
depends on how the
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employees
and staff
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members
are treated
.

Thirdly
, looking towards
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current
scenario younger generation are more found of
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events
and activity.
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So
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company
should organize
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events
such as fun n fare
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event
, religious activity etc.
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Company
should reward their employers by certificate of trophy.
Moreover
, there are
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some
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positive
accepts such as,
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company
provides a
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good
training facilities to enrolled
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members
. Through which they
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get
knowledge about
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work
experience.
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Employees
are the backbone of the
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company
, if it does not
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work
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parallelly
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company
may suffer economy crisis due to irregular coordination and insufficient fluency of
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work
process. Sometime fault is not
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only
of
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company
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but
also
of employers such as inefficient knowledge and irregular to the work.

In my opinion,
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company
should
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work
fluently
with
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employees
and treat their
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workers
with respectful manner and keeping them happy would
eventually
lead to success and business success.
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IELTS essay It seems that many companies today are becoming much more concerned with profit than with the happiness of their workers.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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