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It is true that advertisements are everywhere around us, starting from the commercials that we see on TV every day to the billboard ads on the streets.

It is true that advertisements are everywhere around us, starting from the commercials that we see on TV every day to the billboard ads on the streets. Some people think that this marketing tool affects our buy behaviour while others argue that companies ‘advertising is no longer effective because we aware of their intention. In my opinion, people nowadays are more careful about what they buy. On the one hand, marketing products through advertisement is a powerful tool that is used to convince the customer about a particular product. These ads are effective and use a repetitive technique accompanied with attractive visuals that makes people memorise them. For example, toy commercials that target children often depend on using beautiful colours and rhyme songs to attract these young people and as a consequence increase the sales of their companies. Unfortunately, some customers may be misled by such marketing and buy the product even if it is not essential. On the other hand, some people think that advertisements cannot persuade clients anymore as the majority of them may exaggerate and make promises they cannot keep. Such companies focus on increasing the sales rather than the quality of the product. In another word, they intend to convince people that their products have some extraordinary features to sell more and increase the profits. In contrast, people rely on other buyers’ review of the product before they make a purchase. In addition, they make decisions according to their needs. In conclusion, while some advertisements succeed in convincing people to buy the items they sell, in other cases customers are more spectacular about what they buy. In deeds, other factors such as the quality of the products and good reviews are more influential.
It is true that
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advertisements
are everywhere around us, starting from the commercials that we
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see
on TV every day to the billboard ads on the streets.
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Some
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people
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think
that this marketing tool affects our
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buy
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behaviour
while others argue that
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companies
‘advertising is no longer effective
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because
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we aware
of their intention. In my opinion,
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people
nowadays are more careful about what they
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buy
.

On the one hand, marketing
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products
through
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advertisement
is a powerful tool
that is
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used
to convince the customer about a particular
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product
. These ads are effective and
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use
a repetitive technique
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accompanied with
attractive visuals that
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makes
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people
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memorise
them.
For example
, toy commercials that target children
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often
depend on using
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beautiful
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colours
and rhyme songs to attract these young
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people
and as a consequence increase the sales of their
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companies
. Unfortunately,
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some
customers may
be misled
by such marketing and
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buy
the
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product
even if it is not essential.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
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think
that
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advertisements
cannot persuade clients anymore as the majority of them may exaggerate and
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make
promises they cannot
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keep
. Such
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companies
focus on increasing the sales
rather
than the quality of the
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product
. In another word, they intend to convince
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people
that their
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products
have
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some
extraordinary features to sell more and increase the profits.
In contrast
,
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people
rely on
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other
buyers’ review of the
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product
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before
they
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make
a
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purchase
.
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In
addition, they
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make
decisions according to their needs.

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In
conclusion, while
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some
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advertisements
succeed in convincing
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people
to
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buy
the items they sell, in
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other
cases customers are more spectacular about what they
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buy
.
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In
deeds,
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other
factors such as the quality of the
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products
and
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good
reviews are more influential.
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IELTS essay It is true that advertisements are everywhere around us, starting from the commercials that we see on TV every day to the billboard ads on the streets.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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