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IT IS SAID THAT SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MAKING PEOPLE LAZIER. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? v.1

IT IS SAID THAT SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MAKING PEOPLE LAZIER. v. 1
In today’s world, science and technology have become a crucial part of human’ daily life. Sound great, but people have to face up with the biggest challenging that they get lazy little by little. I totally agree with the statement: It is said that science and automation are making people lazier due to the following reasons First and foremost, it goes without saying that scientific and technological equipment is too intelligent and time-consuming for habitats to have an opportunity to work or act. As can be seen by, they used to walk or ride a bike a long distance now just take a seat on the subway, which is convenient! What is more, machinery, while not innately bad, can be abused. There are numerous applications created back for indirect communication such as messenger, Zalo and so on. Folk just a stay in their homes can connect with people in remote. Thus, smart devices, partly constrain them to be active and energetic. Last but not least, robots- products of machinery are certainly capable of doing trivial things for humanity. An individual often becomes unemployed. Others thank to automate and then they just need to stay in the room all day and have their eyes on the computer's screen. However, they rarely spend free time jogging or doing exercise. All in all, it is undeniable that science and technology have various beneficial, but people shouldn’t abuse it as an arm of maintaining their usefulness.
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lazier due to the following reasons

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and foremost, it goes without saying that scientific and technological equipment is too intelligent and time-consuming for habitats to have an opportunity to work or act. As can be
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by, they
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to walk or ride a bike a long distance
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now
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take a seat on the subway, which is convenient!

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, machinery, while not
innately
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. There are numerous applications created back for indirect communication such as messenger,
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Zalo
and
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on. Folk
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just
a stay in their homes can connect with
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people
in remote.
Thus
, smart devices, partly constrain them to be active and energetic.

Last
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not least, robots- products of machinery are
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capable of doing trivial things for humanity. An individual
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becomes unemployed. Others thank to
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automate and
then they
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need to stay in the room all day and have their eyes on the computer's screen.
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, they rarely spend free time jogging or doing exercise.

All in all, it is undeniable that science and technology have various beneficial,
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but
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people
shouldn’t abuse it as an arm of maintaining their usefulness.
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IELTS essay IT IS SAID THAT SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MAKING PEOPLE LAZIER. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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