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It is right that university graduates earn more money than less well-educated people and for this reason some people believe university students should pay the full cost of their education. Others, however argue that higher education should be provide for free by the government. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is right that university graduates earn more money than less well-educated people and for this reason some people believe university students should pay the full cost of their education. Others, however argue that higher education should be provide for free by the government. JoVoe
Many people hold the view that university education should be free to everyone regardless of their background; however, others think that students attending university should take responsibility for the tuition fee because of the higher salary they can have after obtaining a university degree. From my point of view, I agree with the latter view and this essay will provide the reasonings for both views. On the one hand, it is easy to understand why some people think the government should provide free tertiary education. First, since parents will be encouraged to send their children to school. In fact, without concerning about the fee, more and more students will have a chance to study at university after graduating from the high school to get higher education and skills which will be essential in later life. Second, without paying any cost, students will concentrate on studying and extracurricular activities. Clearly, instead of exhausting themselves with part-time jobs to cover both tuition fees and living costs, they have more time for studying, playing sports, volunteering or pursuing an internship. On the other hand, I must side with those who think students and parents should take responsibility for their tuition fees when studying at university. First, providing free university education might push the government to the verge of bankruptcy. Besides education, the government budget is used to invest in technology, transportation, infrastructure and health care. With the growth of the number of students studying tuition-free, there will not be enough money for other services which are also essential to residents. Furthermore, the quality of education will be better with the financial support from students and their parents. Students will have an effective studying environment with well-equipped facilities and well-qualified teachers. If students are accountable for their tuition fees, they will value more the lessons, have a deep understanding and put what they learn into practice effectively. In conclusion, while attending university without fee helps students with financial problems, I feel it brings about more benefits to society and students themselves when they pay the full cost for their education.
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degree. From my point of view, I
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should provide free tertiary
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their children to school. In fact, without concerning about the
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, more and more
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will have a chance to study at
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after graduating from the high school to
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and extracurricular activities.
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and living costs, they have more time for
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, playing sports, volunteering or pursuing an internship.

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side with those who
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and parents should take responsibility for their tuition
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when
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at
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.
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, providing free
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might push the
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to the verge of bankruptcy.
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, the
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budget is
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used
to invest in technology, transportation, infrastructure and health care. With the growth of the number of
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students
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tuition-free, there will not be
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enough
money for other services which are
also
essential to residents.
Furthermore
, the quality of
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education
will be better with the financial support from
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students
and their parents.
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will have an effective
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studying
environment with well-equipped facilities and well-qualified teachers. If
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students
are accountable for their tuition
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fees
, they will value more the lessons, have a deep understanding and put what they learn into practice
effectively
.

In conclusion
, while attending
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without
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fee
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helps
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students
with financial problems, I feel it brings about more benefits to society and
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students
themselves when they pay the full cost for their
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education
.
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IELTS essay It is right that university graduates earn more money than less well-educated people and for this reason some people believe university students should pay the full cost of their education. Others, however argue that higher education should be provide for free by the government.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
346 words
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