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It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime is a direct influence of the increase in violence in media. To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

Yes I believe that due to an increase in the number of violence news in media channels, has given rise to crimes which are done by the minor age. Firstly this essay will discuss the impact of media on teenagers and secondly how extreme exposure to such harmful contents leads to several other problematic situations. In this modern age, because of technology news is available easily on different platforms, so it has become difficult to avoid watching or reading it. Young people learn what they observe, hence violent contents of media have an adverse effect on the behavior and mentality of these youths, they are not able to differentiate the positive and negative aspects of it. For instance, recently in France there was a tremendous growth in crime rates and the crime branch report shows most of these cases have the involvement of youngsters which get affected by the hazardous contents published by media. On the other hand, continuous exposure of violent news reports effect the younger generation in many ways. As children brains are immature they become easily addicted towards such news article despite not knowing their consequences. It affects the thoughts, eating habits, attitudes of their future life. For example, it has been observed from last few months in India that many student crime cases has been found related to theft, drug smuggling, and bullying. In conclusion, taking into consideration of advancement in technologies, accessibility of media have become quite easy. Overexposure to violence news has significant disadvantages on every younger individual, which manipulate them in wrong directions.
Yes I believe that due to an increase in the number of violence
news
in
media
channels, has
given
rise to
crimes
which
are done
by the minor age.
Firstly
this essay will discuss the impact of
media
on
teenagers
and
secondly
how extreme exposure to such harmful contents leads to several other problematic situations.

In this modern age,
because
of technology
news
is available
easily
on
different
platforms,
so
it has become difficult to avoid watching or reading it. Young
people
learn what they observe,
hence
violent contents of
media
have an adverse effect on the behavior and mentality of these youths, they are not able to differentiate the
positive
and
negative
aspects of it.
For instance
, recently in France there was a tremendous growth in
crime
rates and the
crime
branch report
shows
most of these cases have the involvement of youngsters which
get
affected
by the hazardous contents published by media.

On the other hand
, continuous exposure of violent
news
reports effect the younger generation in
many
ways.
As
children brains are immature they become
easily
addicted towards such
news
article despite not knowing their consequences. It affects the thoughts, eating habits, attitudes of their future life.
For example
, it has
been observed
from last few months in India that
many
student
crime
cases has
been found
related to theft, drug smuggling, and bullying.

In conclusion
,
taking into consideration of
advancement in technologies, accessibility of
media
have become quite easy. Overexposure to violence
news
has significant disadvantages on every younger individual, which manipulate them in
wrong
directions.
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IELTS essay It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime is a direct influence of the increase in violence in media.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
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