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It is often argued that earning lots of money has more significance to people than being content in their work. Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.Do you agree or disagree

It is often argued that earning lots of money has more significance to people than being content in their work. Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. dDNap
It is often argued that earning lots of money has more significance to people than being content in their work. This essay totally disagrees with that statement (or This essay completely agrees with that statement Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that people are increasingly concerned about the risks of stress-related ill- health experienced by individuals in highly paid positions and secondly discuss how they care more about feeling fulfilled at work First of all. I believe that Employees earning a large income are generally under significant mental and emotional pressure to perform well and achieve targets What I mean by this is that This causes many individuals to suffer high levels of stress which can result in both mental and physical One striking example is that This happened to my uncle who used to boast about his huge salary but the boss kept increasing his sales targets and in the end, the stress became too great and he had a nervous breakdown. Now he regrets being driven by the money. That's why it's more important to choose the kind of work that makes vou happy than to look only at a high salary. Another point to consider is that, Having a job that they enjoy doing, and in which they feel valued, is a major concern for most of the modern workforce. In other words, A significant number of people are giving up well-paid positions to do jobs which pay less but that they findimore enjoyable and less stressful. This is clearly illustrated by the fact tlhat a gear ago I left the teaching profession because the workload had become toogreat and l am now a gardener. I feel really fulfilled in this work and I am much more relaxed and happy even though I earn far less money Thus, advantages of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low salary in a long-term perspective. To conclude, I strongly believe that job satisfaction is more beneficial than high salary because of negative effects of work-related stress and the desire to feel happy and fulfilled at work.
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argued that earning lots of money has more significance to
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. This essay
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-related ill- health experienced by individuals in
highly
paid positions and
secondly
discuss how they care more about feeling fulfilled at
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First of all
. I believe that Employees earning a large income are
generally
under significant mental and emotional pressure to perform well and achieve targets What I mean by this is that This causes
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many
individuals to suffer high levels of
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stress
which can result in both mental and physical One striking example is that This happened to my uncle who
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used
to boast about his huge
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salary
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but
the boss
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kept
increasing his sales targets and in the
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end
, the
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stress
became too
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great and
he had a nervous breakdown.
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Now
he regrets
being driven
by the money. That's why it's more
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important
to choose the kind of
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work
that
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makes
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happy than to look
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at a high
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salary
. Another point to consider is that, Having a
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job
that they enjoy doing, and in which they feel valued, is a major concern for most of the modern workforce.
In other words
, A significant number of
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people
are giving up well-paid positions to do
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jobs
which pay less
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but
that they
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enjoyable and less stressful. This is
clearly
illustrated by the fact
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tlhat
a gear ago I
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left
the teaching profession
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because
the workload had become
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toogreat
and l am
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now
a gardener. I feel
really
fulfilled in this
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work and
I am much more relaxed and happy
even though
I earn far less money
Thus
, advantages of
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jobs
that
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keep
you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low
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salary
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in a long-term perspective
.
To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that
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job
satisfaction is more beneficial than high
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salary
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because
of
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negative
effects of work-related
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stress
and the desire to feel happy and fulfilled at
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work
.
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IELTS essay It is often argued that earning lots of money has more significance to people than being content in their work. Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.

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