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A person success now it seems to be judged according to social status and material position old fashioned value such a sauna kindness and trust no longer sem important to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

A person success now it seems to be judged according to social status and material position old fashioned value such a sauna kindness and trust no longer sem important with this opinion Da1mW
In recent times everyone want respect from different people. At that time it is believed that a person can get success in my life through social status and material assets, while traditional value is not significant to get success I completely disagree with this idea due to too many reasons. The major reason is that people are joining army and shoes that work. It means that, early man is ubiquitous for protecting country through anemies attacks. If people and army is not available in a country, then it would be dangerous for ordinary people. Moreover, persons who work for nation, they will get respect and honour from community. For example it was served by defence minister in whole globe is that all citizens give dignity and respect to army man and also do worshipp for her better life and strength. Hence it can be said that social status and material position is a not an essential thing for getting respect becaus army man do not have better possession still they can earn honour from our nation. Another reason is that why I think traditional value has more important than social status is that social workers I mean to see that national leaders were leaving simple lifestyle with their family. They did various things and hard work for getting trust from local people. For example, Gandhiji sardar Vallabhbhai Patel mother Teresa and many more leaders. They do not have status and precious asides but still all citizens show kindness trust and respect for them full stop leaders did social work for our nation as a result they become a good person in front of community. Thus, it can be believed that social workers are better than social status to get important from citizenns. To conclude, people can get success through old fashion value from not only joining army work but also from doing social work. Therefore, i believed that traditional value is more significant in order to get success without better status and material stick things.
In recent times everyone
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want
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respect
from
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different
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people
. At that time it
is believed
that a person can
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get
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success
in my life through
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social
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status
and material assets, while traditional
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value
is not significant to
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get
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success
I completely disagree with this
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idea
due to too
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many
reasons. The major reason is that
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people
are joining
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army
and shoes that
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work
. It means that, early
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man
is ubiquitous for protecting country through
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anemies
attacks. If
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people
and
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army
is not available in a country, then it would be
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dangerous
for ordinary
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people
.
Moreover
, persons who
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work
for nation, they will
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get
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respect
and
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honour
from community. For
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example it
was served
by
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defence
minister in whole globe is that all citizens give dignity and
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respect
to
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army
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man
and
also
do
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worshipp
for her
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better
life and strength.
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Hence
it can
be said
that
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social
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status
and material position is a not an essential thing for getting
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respect
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becaus
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army
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man
do not have
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better
possession
still
they can earn
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honour
from our nation.

Another reason is that why I
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think
traditional
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value
has more
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important
than
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social
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status
is that
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social
workers I mean to
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see
that national leaders were leaving simple lifestyle with their family. They did various things and
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hard
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work
for getting trust from local
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people
.
For example
,
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Gandhiji
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sardar
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Vallabhbhai
Patel
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mother Teresa
and
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many
more leaders. They do not have
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status
and precious asides
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but
still
all citizens
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show
kindness trust and
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respect
for them full
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stop
leaders did
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social
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work
for our nation
as a result
they become a
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good
person in front of community.
Thus
, it can
be believed
that
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social
workers are
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better
than
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social
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status
to
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get
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important
from
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citizenns
.

To conclude
,
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people
can
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get
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success
through
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old
fashion
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value
from not
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only
joining
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army
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work
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but
also
from doing
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social
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work
.
Therefore
,
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i
believed that traditional
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value
is more significant in order to
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get
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success
without
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better
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status
and material stick things.
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IELTS essay A person success now it seems to be judged according to social status and material position old fashioned value such a sauna kindness and trust no longer sem important with this opinion

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335 words
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