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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Now a day, flexibility in selecting hours is available at work places. In some jobs, you can choose according to your routine to fulfill the tasks of the day such as hospital's job where you have to work for long hours to pursue career as a medical professional. No doubt, it is tiring and stressful job but you do not have other option. If I force to select, I would select to work five days a week for shorter hours to enjoy healthy life than longer hours. To begin with, I must say that five days a week is a exact and efficient way to work properly and enjoy weekend completely. For Instance, I worked in a private medical center in Dubai, where I used to work eight hours shift for five days a week. Still I had two days off. Those were enough to plan to go for shopping or had a dinner with family. Moreover, short shift is not that much stressful to feel tired and work stress, which is more common in longer shift. I know one of my friends, who had government job at hospital, doing twelve-hour shifts for two consistent days and followed by two days-off. Nevertheless, unfortunately, she always complained about not feeling well on off days and taking whole day rest to overcome her fatigue. That is why, I always preferred to select shorter time shift to enjoy fully my days off. Second, I believe, short time shifting work outcome is more reliable and efficient than long hours works because your body can not work consistently long hours as same as in less hours. You are able to keep balance between work and rest. Which keeps you too healthy and to ready to work for next day. For example, I started my shift at six o clock early in the morning but I come back at two pm in the afternoon. Still, I have lots of time to spend with my family and go to the bed timely. That is why, everyday, I feel fresh to go at work and take my responsibilities with full energy at work. It also gives you more confidence while you are alert at work especially in medical profession where mistakes can put other's life in danger. It happened many times when workers are doing longer hours and not taking rest properly. It definitely affects your performance and has bad consequences. I believe that fewer hours for five days a week is better than long hours for only three days because it is not healthy for workers to take their responsibilities effectively.
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a day, flexibility in selecting
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hours
is available at
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work
places. In
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some
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jobs
, you can choose according to your routine to fulfill the tasks of the day such as hospital's
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job
where you
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have to
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work
for
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long
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hours
to pursue career as a medical professional. No doubt, it is tiring and stressful
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job
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but
you do not have other option. If I force
Did you mean “selecting”? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, ‘force’ + ‘to’ takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to select
, I would select to
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work
five days a
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week
for shorter
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hours
to enjoy healthy life than longer hours.

To
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with, I
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say that five days a
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is
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a
exact and efficient way to
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work
properly
and enjoy weekend completely.
For Instance
, I worked in a private medical center in Dubai, where I
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used
to
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work
eight
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hours
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shift
for five days a
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week
.
Still
I had two days off. Those were
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enough
to plan to go for shopping or
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had a dinner
with family.
Moreover
, short
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shift
is not that much stressful to feel tired and
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work
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stress
, which is more common in longer
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shift
. I know one of my friends, who had
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government
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job
at hospital, doing twelve-hour
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shifts
for two consistent days and followed by two days-off.
Nevertheless
, unfortunately, she always complained about not feeling well on off days and taking whole day rest to overcome her fatigue.
That is
why, I always preferred to select shorter
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time
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shift
to enjoy
fully
my days off.

Second, I believe, short
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time
shifting
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work
outcome is more reliable and efficient than
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long
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hours
works
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because
your body can not
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work
consistently
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long
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hours
as same as in less
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hours
. You are able to
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keep
balance between
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work
and rest. Which
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keeps
you too healthy and to ready to
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work
for
next
day.
For example
, I
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started
my
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shift
at six o clock early in the morning
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but
I
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come
back at two
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pm in the afternoon
.
Still
, I have lots of
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time
to spend with my family and go to the bed timely.
That is
why,
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everyday
, I feel fresh to go at
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work
and take my responsibilities with full energy at
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work
. It
also
gives you more confidence while you are alert at
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work
especially
in medical profession where mistakes can put other's life in
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danger
. It happened
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many
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times
when workers are doing longer
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hours
and not taking rest
properly
.
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It
definitely affects your performance and has
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bad
consequences.

I believe that fewer
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hours
for five days a
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week
is better than
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long
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hours
for
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only
three days
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because
it is not healthy for workers to take their responsibilities
effectively
.
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IELTS essay It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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