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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view? xNoa
The relationship between modern technology and traditional culture has always been a great concern of many. Some people argue that they both cannot go well with each other and I completely agree with the idea. This essay will discuss how technology affects a culture in a bad way. Firstly, media has played an integral part in damaging the cultures of the world. Advancements in the field of telecommunication have turned the world into a global village. Whatever is available at one corner of the globe can easily be found on the other, which has damaged the uniqueness of any area. This is true for every aspect of life, like the food we eat, the dress we wear, the language we speak. One can see that American culture has become dominant over others, and it is prevailing all over the world. More and more people in Asian countries, for example, are copying the styles of American outfits and street foods in India are widely replaced by KFC and McDonalds. Therefore, media plays a crucial part in making the cultures less distinctive. Furthermore, while development in technology makes our life easier, it also changed the way we live. The introduction of many appliances like the microwave and electric grills has radically transformed the way of our traditional cooking. People no longer spend time in the kitchen to make food for themselves as they were used to do before. In addition, development in travel and tourism industry has made it affordable for everyone to explore the world and to visit different countries. Every time, when a tourist visits a country, he brings with it his own culture, and it leaves some impression on the local people. For instance, a great number of people in Northern Pakistan started wearing jeans after the development of tourist attraction in that area. Hence, the link between the evolution of technology and cultural damage can be seen. In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that while technology brings comfort to our life, it makes the cultures more vague and indistinctive.
The relationship between modern
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and traditional
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culture
has always been a great concern of
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many
.
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Some
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people
argue that they both cannot go well with each other and I completely
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agree
with the
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idea
. This essay will discuss how
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technology
affects a
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culture
in a
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bad
way.

Firstly
, media has played an integral part in damaging the
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cultures
of the
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world
. Advancements in the field of telecommunication have turned the
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world
into a global village. Whatever is available at one corner of the globe can
easily
be found
on the other, which has damaged the uniqueness of any area. This is true for every aspect of life, like the food we eat, the dress we wear, the language we speak. One can
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see
that American
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culture
has become dominant over others, and it is prevailing all over the
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world
. More and more
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people
in Asian countries,
for example
, are copying the styles of American outfits and street foods in India are
widely
replaced by KFC and
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McDonalds
.
Therefore
, media plays a crucial part in making the
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cultures
less distinctive.

Furthermore
, while development in
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technology
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makes
our life easier, it
also
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changed
the way we
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live
. The introduction of
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many
appliances like the microwave and electric grills has
radically
transformed the way of our traditional cooking.
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People
no longer spend time in the kitchen to
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make
food for themselves as they were
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used to do
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before
.
In addition
, development in travel and tourism industry has made it affordable for everyone to explore the
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world
and to visit
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different
countries. Every time, when a tourist visits a country, he brings with it his
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own
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culture
, and it
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leaves
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some
impression on the local
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people
.
For instance
, a great number of
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people
in Northern Pakistan
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started
wearing jeans after the development of tourist attraction in that area.
Hence
, the link between the evolution of
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technology
and cultural damage can be
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seen
.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
with the statement that while
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technology
brings comfort to our life, it
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makes
the
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cultures
more vague and
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indistinctive
.
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IELTS essay It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. with this view?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
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