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It is impossible to help all the people in the world who need help, so governments must help the people in their countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is impossible to help all the people in the world who need help, so governments must help the people in their countries. with this statement? raVAl
Over the years, the world has witnessed many disasters related to people and environment. Helping people in such cases has become the topic of the day. I firmly believe that it is difficult to help needy people around the world. However, the governments has strong role to help their citizen. This essay will detailed the opinion. Low budget in certain government means no more money for country itself facilities. Hence, helping poor peole around the world became unapplicable task. Moreover, assiting another country isn't easy. It requires many stages and each stage needs an expensive budgets. For example, if there is cyclon visit a country it cause a huge looses like damage the essential facilities. After this disaster, people will need various of needs like cars, shelter, food and clothes. It is difficult to move all these requirements to another country that may cost alot of money which is better for its own citizens. On the other hand, it is better, the helps of governments was limited on their citizens. The public has many prolems related to unemployment and poverty. Many locals need to shelter and food and while there is no job, there is no money for even food. So, the government sould accept careers applications and provide citizen at least with shelters and food to avoid famine. In conclusion, everyone can help peole around the world. In fact, this is the responsibility of the governments for its locals.
Over the years, the
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has witnessed
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many
disasters related to
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people
and environment. Helping
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people
in such cases has become the topic of the day. I
firmly
believe that it is difficult to
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help
needy
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people
around the
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world
.
However
, the
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governments
has strong role to
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help
their citizen. This essay will
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detailed
the opinion.

Low budget in certain
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government
means no more money for
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country
itself facilities.
Hence
, helping poor
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peole
around the
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world
became
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unapplicable
task.
Moreover
,
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assiting
another
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country
isn't easy. It requires
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many
stages and each stage
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needs
an expensive
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budgets
.
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, if there is
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cyclon
visit a
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country
it
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cause
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a huge
looses like damage the essential facilities. After this disaster,
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people
will
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need
various of
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needs
like cars, shelter,
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food
and clothes. It is difficult to
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move
all these requirements to another
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country
that may cost
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alot
of money which is better for its
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own
citizens.

On the other hand
, it is better, the
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helps
of
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governments
was limited
on their citizens. The public has
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many
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prolems
related to unemployment and poverty.
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Many
locals
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need
to shelter and
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food
and while there is no job, there is no money for even
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food
.
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So
, the
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government
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sould
accept careers applications and provide citizen at least with shelters and
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food
to avoid famine.

In conclusion
, everyone can
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help
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peole
around the
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world
. In fact, this is the responsibility of the
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governments
for its locals.
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IELTS essay It is impossible to help all the people in the world who need help, so governments must help the people in their countries. with this statement?

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240 words
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