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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. Jd5B
Social media is booming these days as everything get spread in all the world with in the hours that is posted on it. Social media took place in people’s life they are depended on it for news and the other information. I disagree the most and agree to some point that schools must have social backgrounds with other studies as reasons are discussed in upcoming paragraph. Schools where children go to learn something that will be useful to them and they can build their career in specific field. Social media is the way of communication with the world and it is filled with the reamers as there is no perfect information present which should be there. If children learn the social media then there is high chance of getting distracted from the path. For example: if a child wants to be an Engineer or a Doctor then he should learn those things that he/she needed in future but due to social media as a subject they find it more interesting thing then their field and get distracted. On the other hand, it is use full to the children to learn social media as a subject in schools as they gain more knowledge rather then they get in other subjects for instance: a child who has no interest in maths and others, then he will found social media as an interesting subject and through the social media he can build his career like journalist. Overall, it can be said that the mixture of all subjects and the social media are good and bad for them depending upon them how they get in within it. As according to me it should not be a better idea to teach social media.
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is booming these days as everything
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spread in all the world with in the hours that
is posted
on it.
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Social
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media
took place in
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people
’s life they
are depended
on it for news and the
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other
information. I disagree the most and
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agree
to
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some
point that schools
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have
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social
backgrounds with
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other
studies as reasons
are discussed
in upcoming paragraph.

Schools where children go to
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learn
something that will be useful to
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them and
they can build their career in specific field.
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Social
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media
is the way of communication with the world and it
is filled
with the reamers as there is no perfect information present which should be there. If children
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learn
the
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social
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media
then there is high chance of getting distracted from the path.
For example
: if a child wants to be an Engineer or a Doctor then he should
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learn
those things that he/she needed in future
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due to
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social
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as a
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subject
they find it more interesting thing
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then
their field and
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distracted.

On the
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hand, it is
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full to the children to
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learn
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as a
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subject
in schools as they gain more knowledge
rather
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then
they
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in
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maths
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and others
, then he will
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found
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as an interesting
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and through the
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he can build his career like journalist.

Overall
, it can
be said
that the mixture of all
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subjects
and the
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social
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are
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and
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for them depending upon them how they
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in within it.
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As
according to me it should not be a better
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to teach
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IELTS essay It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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