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: It is important for all cities and towns to have large outdoor public spaces, such as parks or squares. Do you agree or disagree?

: It is important for all cities and towns to have large outdoor public spaces, such as parks or squares. lPjW
Nowadays, in the increasingly developed society, people’s live are also gradually improved. That the reason why activities and entertainment areas are indispensable. Although, the overall impact of this discernable trend is provoking likely debates. I hold to the belief that the imperfectness is inevitably far outweighed by preeminence. It should be stressed that the subscription to the ground that “the opening of amusement parks is to render land useless and it should be converted to the other practical purposes. ” is totally unthorough. Firstly, the open areas have always been considered as the heart of the cities, where people gather with friends and family for entertainment. Besides, children and their parents can spend time here for more emotional bonding after their busy schedules. Furthermore, parks and plazas are often placing of relaxation for the elderly and specially these places attract a lot of tourist as they often have a history behind their creation. Therefore, the environmental population in the cities is increasing, making the government and the people very concerned. They should preserve them for future generation is absolutely imperative. Nonetheless, it is an incontestable fact that cities are getting crowded each day and lacking places to build public and commercial center. New public transportation systems need a large place to build stations and wider lanes. For instance, New York planned nearly 200 years ago and the roads in the city were small and narrow. Subsequently, the New York City government transformed many historical parks and gardens into car parks and highways. However, it also causing criticism from people living there when having to relocate and affecting their lives. To recapitulate, although the explosion of the construction of large public facilities raises tough challenges and is likely to be complicated and unmanageable, I hold to the belief the huge advantages of the expansion of large open-air public spaces really inevitably far outweighs the potential disadvantages associated have an effective method for management as well as realistic and brilliants plans to development life.
Nowadays, in the
increasingly
developed society,
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people’s
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live
are
also
gradually
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improved
. That the reason why activities and entertainment areas are indispensable.
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Although
, the
overall
impact of this
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discernable
trend is provoking likely debates. I hold to the belief that the imperfectness is
inevitably
far outweighed by preeminence.

It should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
that the subscription to the ground that “the opening of amusement
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parks
is to render land useless and it should
be converted
to the other practical purposes. ” is
totally
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unthorough
.

Firstly
, the open areas have always
been considered
as the heart of the
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cities
, where
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people
gather with friends and family for entertainment.
Besides
, children and their parents can spend time here for more emotional bonding after their busy schedules.
Furthermore
,
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parks
and plazas are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
placing of relaxation for the elderly and
specially
these places attract
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a lot of
tourist as they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
have a history behind their creation.
Therefore
, the environmental population in the
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cities
is increasing, making the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and the
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people
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very
concerned. They should preserve them for future generation is
absolutely
imperative.

Nonetheless, it is an incontestable fact that
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cities
are getting crowded each day and lacking places to build
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public
and commercial center. New
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public
transportation systems need a large place to build stations and wider lanes.
For instance
, New York planned
nearly
200 years ago and the roads in the city were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
and narrow.
Subsequently
, the New York City
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
transformed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
historical
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parks
and gardens into car
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parks
and highways.
However
, it
also
causing criticism from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living there when having to relocate and affecting their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.

To recapitulate, although the explosion of the construction of large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
facilities raises tough challenges and is likely to
be complicated
and unmanageable, I hold to the belief the huge advantages of the expansion of large open-air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
spaces
really
inevitably
far outweighs the potential disadvantages associated have an effective method for management
as well
as realistic and brilliants plans to development life.
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IELTS essay : It is important for all cities and towns to have large outdoor public spaces, such as parks or squares.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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