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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spot or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spot or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion E3pLR
It is a long-lasting debate whether a model sportsman or musician is result of by born talent or achieved skill by hard work and dedication. A significant portion of people believe that some are born with excellent merit who are doing excellent in sports and music. Some claimed that talent is not a matter of gift rather it is the output of proper training, coaching and enormous practices. It is commonly believed that medalist athlete or successful musician is a god gifted talent which explore anyhow whatever he or she get access to sufficient amenities to shape their potentiality or not. In addition, the by born merit doesn’t require always formal institutional support and nursing. There are many potentials in the world who didn’t receive formal support to enhance their capacity. As for example, Siddikur had no excellent background history of golf sports, he was just golf ball collector who is now big figure in international golfer. Generally, we see that almost merely high officials of armed forces have sufficient modern facilities to practice golf in the cantonments. So, talent is a gift which doesn’t belongs to all. Besides this, Ranu Mondal of India, is well known singer who never received formal lessons from singer expert. On the other hand, talent is not only the matter of gifted ability but the combination of practice, dedication, hard work, patience, commitment, adequate logistics facilities for nursing the skill. Many few talented persons are doing excellent and shining in their respective sectors. Moreover, surrounding environment paved the way for enhancing the skill. For instance, the USA is smaller than China in terms of population but they always secured top most numbers of gold medal in every Olympic game since they provide all sorts of amenities for the sports man where circumstances also contribute a lot. In conclusion, undoubtedly I must say that potentiality need proper guidance, mentoring, coaching and supportive environment to flourish which is almost common to the renowned figure whatever in terms of sports or music.
It is a long-lasting debate whether a model sportsman or musician is result of by born
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talent
or achieved
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skill
by
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hard
work and dedication. A significant portion of
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people
believe that
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some
are born
with
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excellent
merit
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who
are doing
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excellent
in
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sports
and music.
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Some
claimed that
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talent
is not a matter of gift
rather
it is the output of proper training, coaching and enormous practices.

It is
commonly
believed that medalist athlete or successful musician is a god gifted
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talent
which explore anyhow whatever he or she
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get
access to sufficient amenities to shape their potentiality or not.
In addition
, the by born merit doesn’t
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require always
formal institutional support and nursing. There are
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many
potentials in the world
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who
didn’t receive formal support to enhance their capacity. As
for example
,
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Siddikur
had no
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excellent
background history of golf
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sports
, he was
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just
golf ball collector
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who
is
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now
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big
figure in international golfer.
Generally
, we
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see
that almost
merely
high officials of armed forces have sufficient modern facilities to practice golf in the cantonments.
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So
,
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talent
is a gift which doesn’t belongs to all.
Besides
this,
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Ranu
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Mondal
of India, is well known singer
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who
never received formal lessons from singer expert.

On the other hand
,
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talent
is not
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only
the matter of gifted ability
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but
the combination of practice, dedication,
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hard
work, patience, commitment, adequate logistics facilities for nursing the
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skill
.
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Many
few talented persons are doing
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excellent
and shining in their respective sectors.
Moreover
, surrounding environment paved the way for enhancing the
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skill
.
For instance
, the USA is smaller than China in terms of population
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but
they always secured top most numbers of gold medal in every Olympic game since they provide all sorts of amenities for the
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sports
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man
where circumstances
also
contribute a lot.

In conclusion
,
undoubtedly
I
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must
say that potentiality need proper guidance, mentoring, coaching and supportive environment to flourish which is almost common to the renowned figure whatever in terms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
or music.
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spot or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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