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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued whether children with naturally gifted talents have a tendency to become experts in their professional career, like sports or music. While this opinion has become a concrete belief in the majority of the population, a number of people hold the perspective that training can transform an untalented one to a good athlete or music performer. This essay agrees with the first statement and disagrees with the latter one. First, it is clear that being born with a gifted talent helps you shorten ways to excelling in a preferential career. One who owns this finds it easier in learning new knowledge and specific skills. As a result, these children find fulfillment and productivity in their daily practice. They gradually make good progress throughout the time and find their passion, ultimately. These children will grow their grit in overcoming obstacles, stereotypes, as well as their talent ignites perseverance. Despite this aforementioned belief custom, it is assumed that children who have no natural gift can also get better in their expertise, like the gifted one. There is a formula known as the “1000-hour rule”, which means one has to practice 1000 hours to become an outstanding one in every career. This has applied to The Beatles, as they used to play 8 hour non-stop in Berlin at the beginning of the band. Besides, some gifted ones can become overdependent on their skills. They may neglect longtime training, which is considered as a formula to become outliers. As a result, their talents soon fade and these ones find it difficult to start again. However, this should be regarded as a minor issue, as their mindset may change through time. Also, the 1000-hour formula is not true in many composers, athletes, etc in history, like Mozart, who composed various musicals, piano plays before deceased at 20. To sum up, having natural certain talents is a great advantage to become expertise in a career which requires passion. Hence, children should not forget that practice makes perfect, as becoming an expert in any profession requires longtime learning and perseverance.
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gifted
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talents
have a tendency to
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become
experts in their professional
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career
, like sports or music. While this opinion has
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become
a concrete belief in the majority of the population, a number of
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people
hold the perspective that training can transform an untalented one to a
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good
athlete or music performer. This essay
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first
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, it is
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clear
that
being born
with a
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gifted
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talent
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helps
you shorten ways to excelling in a preferential
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career
. One who
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owns
this
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finds
it easier in learning new knowledge and specific
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skills
.
As a result
, these
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children
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find
fulfillment and productivity in their daily practice. They
gradually
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make
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good
progress throughout the time and
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find
their passion,
ultimately
. These
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children
will grow their grit in overcoming obstacles, stereotypes,
as well
as their
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talent
ignites perseverance.

Despite this aforementioned belief custom, it
is assumed
that
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children
who have no natural gift can
also
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get
better in their expertise, like the
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gifted
one. There is a formula known as the
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“1000-hour
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rule
”, which means one
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has to
practice 1000
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hours
to
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become
an outstanding one in every
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career
. This has applied to The Beatles, as they
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used
to play 8
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hour
non-
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stop
in Berlin at the beginning of the band.
Besides
,
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some
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gifted
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ones
can
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become
overdependent on their
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skills
. They may neglect longtime training, which
is considered
as a formula to
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become
outliers.
As a result
, their
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talents
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soon
fade and these
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ones
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find
it difficult to
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start
again.
However
, this should
be regarded
as a minor issue, as their mindset may
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change
through time.
Also
, the
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1000-hour
formula is not true in
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many
composers, athletes, etc in history, like Mozart, who composed various musicals, piano plays
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before
deceased at 20.

To sum up, having natural certain
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talents
is a great advantage to
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become
expertise in a
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career
which requires passion.
Hence
,
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children
should not forget that practice
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
perfect, as becoming an expert in any profession requires longtime learning and perseverance.
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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