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Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued whether restricting detailed criminal description on the media should be carried out due to its adverse effects on newspapers readers and viewers. This essay agrees with the statement because of the impact violence and criminal news bring out and restrictions should be put to minimize the negative influence on society. Firstly, widespread detailed criminal description on media forms prompts negative cognition in societies, which results in making people become more worried about insecurities of where they live. Readers and TV viewers perceive many forms of negative news could develop a fearful and anxious mindset. As a result, they will gradually lose the trust and ideal in a good and well-mannered society. For many parents, seeing and approaching these news daily can make them feel more fearful about independent safety for their children. As a consequence, they could become overprotected to their offspring, which later lead the juniors to become over - dependent on older generations, due to their lack of life skills and interactions outside the street. Secondly, privacy, identity of the criminal and victim’s family and their circles should be a large concern. The problem of the media lies in protecting the privacy of these people. When reporters write the news about criminals, they investigate not only the crime scene but also the criminal’s houses, families, and their neighborhoods. Also, private information about the victim is also collected through interviews with the victim’s families and circles. As a consequence, both criminal and victim’s circles will be seriously mental affected through their reputation, which is unpleasant. Criminal’s circles will get isolated, bullied, harassed and even have to move out of their residence to find peace in their lives. Victim’s circles also become vulnerable when their privacy is widely revealed. Third, repeated updates of crime news can give rise to false judgement and discrimination about a particular group of people. The death of George Floyd and other African Americans through false convictions of officers are regarded as the result of frequent news about black criminals. Despite the fact that documenting criminal description can influence individuals in an unfavorable way, crime news can be regarded as a way of informing the public to create a safer community. Through the warnings about culprits, one can become more alert when they go out and they can prepare defensive skills to help them exit dangerous situations. However, regular broadcasting about these news can make people lack trust and forget the meanings of good strangers surrounding them. In conclusion, policy and legislation should be implemented to restrict the bad influence of detailed criminal description as these news give rise to individual’s insecurity about a good society, unprotected identity and privacy of the criminal and victim’s circles, and falsely racial discrimination.
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argued whether restricting detailed
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criminal
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description
on the media should
be carried
out due to its adverse effects on newspapers readers and viewers. This essay
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agrees
with the statement
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because
of the impact violence and
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criminal
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news
bring out and restrictions should
be put
to minimize the
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negative
influence on society.

Firstly
, widespread detailed
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criminal
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description
on media forms prompts
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negative
cognition in societies, which results in making
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people
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become
more worried about insecurities of where they
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live
.

Readers and TV viewers perceive
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many
forms of
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negative
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news
could develop a fearful and anxious mindset.
As a result
, they will
gradually
lose the trust and ideal in a
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good
and well-mannered society.

For
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many
parents, seeing and approaching these
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news
daily can
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make
them feel more fearful about independent safety for their children. As a consequence, they could
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become
overprotected to their offspring, which later lead the juniors to
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become
over
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-
dependent on older generations, due to their lack of life
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skills
and interactions outside the street.

Secondly
, privacy, identity of the
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criminal
and
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victim’s
family and their
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circles
should be a large concern. The problem of the media lies in protecting the privacy of these
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people
. When reporters write the
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news
about
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criminals
, they investigate not
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only
the crime scene
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but
also
the
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criminal’s
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houses
, families, and their neighborhoods.
Also
, private information about the
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victim
is
also
collected
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through
interviews with the
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victim’s
families and
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circles
. As a consequence, both
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criminal
and
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victim’s
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circles
will be
seriously
mental
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affected
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through
their reputation, which is unpleasant.
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Criminal’s
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circles
will
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get
isolated, bullied, harassed and even
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have to
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move
out of their residence to find peace in their
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lives
.
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Victim’s
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circles
also
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become
vulnerable when their privacy is
widely
revealed.

Third, repeated updates of crime
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news
can give rise to false judgement and discrimination about a particular group of
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people
. The death of George Floyd and other African Americans
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through
false convictions of officers
are regarded
as the result of frequent
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news
about black criminals.

Despite the fact that documenting
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criminal
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description
can influence individuals
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in an unfavorable way
, crime
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news
can
be regarded
as a way of informing the public to create a safer community.
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Through
the warnings about culprits, one can
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become
more alert when they go
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out and
they can prepare defensive
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skills
to
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help
them exit
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dangerous
situations.
However
, regular broadcasting about these
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news
can
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make
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people
lack trust and forget the meanings of
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good
strangers surrounding them.

In conclusion
, policy and legislation should
be implemented
to restrict the
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bad
influence of detailed
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criminal
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description
as these
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news
give rise to individual’s insecurity about a
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good
society, unprotected identity and privacy of the
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criminal
and
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victim’s
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circles
, and
falsely
racial discrimination.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on the media.

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
458 words
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