Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. R1a8
There is a popular opinion that certain individuals have innate ingenuity since childhood whereas, others do not have any such special inborn dexterity or ability. Although this is true, many hold a viewpoint that an individual who has receptivity and determination can master any art or become adept at any activity like sport or music. I strongly agree with the opinion that even if people are not fortunate to be born with a special talent, they can do wonders in life. In the following paragraphs I will delve into both the ideas. Successfully There are a zillion of people who are born with some special abilities or talents such as a soothing voice, an ability to play any particular sport well, or brilliance, which can allow one to do heavy calculations real quick. These types of people are considered to be blessed and always have a better chance to succeed than individuals who lack any such abilities since the former don’t have to put a lot of effort to learn. Having a talent that was never learnt or developed is a gift from the almighty and people who possess these qualities ought to make a really good use of that skill in that they can pursue a career or business for which they do not need to face a lot of hardships while they work after growing up. On the contrary, individuals devoid of special capabilities can always learn or develop any skillset. Hard work, determination, and a strong aspiration can lead one to whatever he/she desires to become. However, it calls for strenuous efforts, constant practice and a lot of time investment. It is irrefutable that hard work pays off if perseverance and true passion are employed in the right manner. For instance, according to an article published in ‘The New York Times’ in 2015, a boy named Alan, suffering from ADHD, outmanoeuvred a skilled competitor at vocal singing competition after a constant practice of three years. Hence, I believe it is not necessarily true that only those born with a talent can soar high in life. There is always a way to learn any skill provided that one has dogged determination. To conclude, although children born with a talent always have a good chance of success in sports or music yet any skill can be developed with proper learning, which can lead to a promising future for an individual.
There is a popular opinion that certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
have innate ingenuity since childhood whereas, others do not have any such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
inborn dexterity or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ability
. Although this is true,
Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: "many holds".
many hold
a viewpoint that an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
has receptivity and determination can master any art or become adept at any activity like sport or music. I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the opinion that even if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are not fortunate to
be born
with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
, they can do wonders in life. In the following paragraphs I will delve into both the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
Successfully


There are a zillion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
are born
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abilities
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talents
such as a soothing voice, an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ability
to play any particular sport well, or brilliance, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
one to do heavy calculations real quick. These types of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are considered
to
be blessed
and always have a better chance to succeed than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
lack any such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abilities
since the former don’t
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
effort to learn. Having a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
that was never
Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.
learnt
or developed is a gift from the almighty and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
possess these qualities ought to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
in that they can pursue a career or business for which they do not need to face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
hardships while they work after growing up.

On the contrary
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
devoid of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
special
capabilities can always learn or develop any
Possible spelling mistake found.
skillset
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Hard
work, determination, and a strong aspiration can lead one to whatever he/she desires to become.
However
, it calls for strenuous efforts, constant practice and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
time investment. It is irrefutable that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work pays off if perseverance and true passion
are employed
in the right manner.
For instance
, according to an article published in ‘The New York Times’ in 2015, a boy named Alan, suffering from ADHD,
Possible spelling mistake found.
outmanoeuvred
a skilled competitor at vocal singing competition after a constant practice of three years.
Hence
, I believe it is not
necessarily
true that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
those born with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
can soar high in life. There is always a way to learn any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
provided that one has dogged determination.

To conclude
, although children born with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
talent
always have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
chance of success in sports or music
yet
any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
can
be developed
with proper learning, which can lead to a promising future for an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts