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It is generally accepted that families are now not as close as they used to be.Give some reasons why this has happened

It is generally accepted that families are now not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this has happened l9mW
It is comparably true that now days family members seems to be comparably further from each other than they used to be before. According to me this happens. It is generally accepyed that family members are not as closed as they used to be. Give because of the differences of views of an old and new generation. I also insist on developing firm rapport by increasing the frequency of family gatherings and events. To begin with, in this age, young individuals prefer to spend an enormous amount of time with friends and peers rather than family. The main reason for this negative trend is that sometimes young adults consider irrevelant to appear on their family evenings as they extrememely busy either with their studies or work. On the other hand, youngsters prefer to stay away from their parents as they think that it will snatch away their freedom from them even if they are aware of stong family ties. A great illustration could be the proliferation of old homes where offsprings are fond of keep their mother and father. They think that it is an extra burden as it cost them a pretty penny. In addition, they will be free from excessive monitoring and rituals which yheir elders used to follow. Thus it is important that members of the family try to preserve their bond as much as possible. On the other hand, there are a couple of methods which can probably help modern families to provide their ties within the family even in critical days. Such as: during this pandemic period, shopping in fact, one of the therapeutic activities whivh is also good at maintaining better relationships with kith and kins. Furthermore, contact races when individuals have topics that have semblances with each other. So shopping is a great alternative to boring conversation. In addition, Ibalso think that going for dinner can be another way to bury the hatchet between the family members. Moreover, going for weekend cinemas can also work which can also work as a catalyst to develop a better relationship between them. To conclude, although everone has diverse commitments in their public and private lives, I consider that family duties are much more crucial. Therefore, to maintain strong ties between family members one should prirotize their family.
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seems to be
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than they
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used
to be
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before
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this happens. It is
generally
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accepyed
that
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family
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members
are not as closed as they
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used
to be. Give
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because
of the differences of views of an
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old
and new generation. I
also
insist on developing firm rapport by increasing the frequency of
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family
gatherings and
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events
. To
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begin
with, in this age, young individuals prefer to spend an enormous amount of time with friends and peers
rather
than
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family
. The main reason for this
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negative
trend is that
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sometimes
young adults consider
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irrevelant
to appear on their
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family
evenings as they
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extrememely
busy either with their studies or work. On the
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other
hand, youngsters prefer to stay away from their parents as they
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think
that it will snatch away their freedom from them even if they are aware of
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stong
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ties. A great illustration could be the proliferation of
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old
homes where
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offsprings
are fond of
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keep
their mother and father. They
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think
that it is an extra burden as it cost them a pretty penny.
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, they will be free from excessive monitoring and rituals which
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yheir
elders
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used
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it is
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important
that
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members
of the
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family
try to preserve their bond as much as possible. On the
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other
hand, there are a couple of methods which can
probably
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help
modern
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families
to provide their ties within the
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family
even in critical days. Such as: during this pandemic period, shopping in fact, one of the therapeutic activities
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whivh
is
also
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good
at maintaining better relationships with kith and
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kins
.
Furthermore
, contact races when individuals have topics that have semblances with each
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other
.
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So
shopping is a great alternative to boring conversation.
In addition
,
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Ibalso
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think
that going for dinner can be another way to bury the hatchet between the
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family
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
members
.
Moreover
, going for weekend cinemas can
also
work which can
also
work as a catalyst to develop a better relationship between them.

To conclude
, although
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everone
has diverse commitments in their public and private
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lives
, I consider that
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family
duties are much more crucial.
Therefore
, to maintain strong ties between
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family
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members
one should
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prirotize
their
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family
.
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IELTS essay It is generally accepted that families are now not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this has happened

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  American English
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