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It is better for students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is better for students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. wygl
It is better for students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? It is often argued by many people that whether the pupils should stay away from their families while doing higher study in university, whilst others believe that they should not leave their parents. I agree with the first statement of living alone. This essay will show that how staying away is help students, to grow independently as well as they gain knowledge about how the world works. Universities want their students to learn the life skills such as being confident and decision-making. These can only be learnt while living away from parents, as one will be able to decide for themselves, without the interference of their parents, which will boost their confidence. According to the university of California's recent survey about students, who live separately from their parents excel in every field, as they make their own choices, without feeling burden from their families; to prove their choice is right, they work hard on them, which make them the best among the rest. Furthermore living away from parents teach them how this real world works, They can explore the outer world and meet new people of different culture and countries, which would increase their knowledge and communication skill. On the top of that, one can learn about different careers to choose from, without being pressurize from their parents. For example, my cousin who is studying at Ohio University is much more outspoken and sure about his career then the time, he was living at home, he was rather shy and did not know what job we wanted to do. To conclude living from away from home for university study increases the knowledge of students as well as make them independent.
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university
studies
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. To what extent do you
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agree
or disagree?

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argued by
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that whether the pupils should stay
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away
from their families while doing higher study in
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university
, whilst others believe that they should not
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leave
their
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parents
. I
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agree
with the
first
statement of
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living
alone. This essay will
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show
that how staying
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away
is
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help
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students
, to grow
independently
as well
as they gain knowledge about how the world works.

Universities want their
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students
to learn the life
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skills
such as being confident and decision-making. These can
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only
be
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learnt
while
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living
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away
from
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parents
, as one will be able to decide for themselves, without the interference of their
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parents
, which will boost their confidence. According to the
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university of California
's recent survey about
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students
, who
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live
separately
from their
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parents
excel in every field, as they
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make
their
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own
choices, without feeling burden from their families; to prove their choice is right, they work
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hard
on them, which
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make
them the best among the rest.

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Furthermore
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living
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from
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teach them how this real world works, They can explore the outer world and
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meet
new
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people
of
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different
culture and countries, which would increase their knowledge and communication
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skill
. On the top of that, one can learn about
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different
careers to choose from, without being
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pressurize
from their
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parents
.
For example
, my cousin who is studying at Ohio
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University
is much more outspoken and sure about his career
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then
the time, he was
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living
at home, he was
rather
shy and did not know what job we wanted to do.

To conclude
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living
from
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away
from home for
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university
study increases the knowledge of
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students
as well
as
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make
them independent.
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IELTS essay It is better for students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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