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It is being agrued that the responsibility of mitigating globe environmental degradation ought to be assumed by government instead of individual . Personally, I disagree with the view because I believe that both are equally responsible for cleanliness of environment.

It is being agrued that the responsibility of mitigating globe environmental degradation ought to be assumed by government instead of individual. Personally, I disagree with the view because I believe that both are equally responsible for cleanliness of environment. 2ROrA
On the one hand, I accept that it is responsibility of government to spread awareness among the people regarding cleanliness of environment. Because people do not have any fear of diseases due to cleanness of their surrounding, it becomes beneficial for them. As a result, they would also prefer to clean their environment regularly. Furthermore, government should also implement some strict laws for public. This implementation of rules helps in deteriorating the damage of environment. As a result, it is helping in reduce degradation in environment. On the other hand, I believe that it is also responsibility of individuals to clean their surrounding frequently. Individuals ought to implement some rules and regulations on themselves. They would not through the garbage on roads and instead of it they can use dustbins for wastage which are provided by governments. If they do these activities for cleanness of environment, It will also attract most of the tourists. Tourists also like to live in fresher and cleaner areas. In conclusion, while i agree that government should spread awareness of purifying for environment and implement strict laws, in my opinion people should also follow the rules and regulations.
On the one hand, I accept that it is responsibility of
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government
to spread awareness among the
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people
regarding cleanliness of
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environment
.
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Because
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people
do not have any fear of diseases due to cleanness of their surrounding, it becomes beneficial for them.
As a result
, they would
also
prefer to clean their
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environment
regularly
.
Furthermore
,
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government
should
also
implement
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some
strict laws for public. This implementation of
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rules
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helps
in deteriorating the
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damage of
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environment
.
As a result
, it is helping in
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reduce
degradation in
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environment
.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is
also
responsibility of individuals to clean their surrounding
frequently
. Individuals ought to implement
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations on themselves. They would not through the garbage on roads and
instead
of it they can
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use
dustbins for wastage which
are provided
by
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governments
. If they do these activities for cleanness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, It will
also
attract most of the tourists. Tourists
also
like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in fresher and cleaner areas.
In conclusion
, while
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i
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agree
that
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government
should spread awareness of purifying for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and implement strict laws, in my opinion
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
also
follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations.
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IELTS essay It is being agrued that the responsibility of mitigating globe environmental degradation ought to be assumed by government instead of individual. Personally, I disagree with the view because I believe that both are equally responsible for cleanliness of environment.

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