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It is argued that technology become a part of our lives, and it is include in different fields such as education, industry and commerce.

It is argued that technology become a part of our lives, and it is include in different fields such as education, industry and commerce. Saving time is one of the main advantages for technology, and is one of the main disadvantages of technology is the effect on health. One of the main advantages of distance education is that it saves the student's time to arrive at the university or school Students should invest their time in study and activities For example, in Syria: Students spend half their day waiting for transportation to reach their schools and universities. This results in a waste of their time. And One of the disadvantages of using technology is its effect on health. Students spend a lot of time looking at computer and phone screens Screen radiation affects their eyesight. For example, most programmers wear radiation protection glasses As a result, with the continuous use of electronic devices, this will lead to loss of health. In conclusion, Electronic devices have advantages and disadvantages. We must take advantage of the advantages and prevent disadvantages by spending specific hours a day.
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fields such as education, industry and commerce.

Saving
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time
is one of the main
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advantages
for
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technology
, and is one of the main disadvantages of
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technology
is the effect on health.

One of the main
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advantages
of distance education is that it saves the student's
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time
to arrive at the university or school

Students should invest their
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time
in study and activities

For example
, in Syria: Students spend half their day waiting for transportation to reach their schools and universities.

This results in a waste of their time.

And One of the disadvantages of using
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technology
is its effect on health.

Students spend
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a lot of
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time
looking at computer and phone screens

Screen radiation affects their eyesight.

For example
, most programmers wear radiation protection glasses

As a result
, with the continuous
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use
of electronic devices, this will lead to loss of health.

In conclusion
, Electronic devices have
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advantages
and disadvantages. We
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advantage
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disadvantages by spending specific hours a day.
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IELTS essay It is argued that technology become a part of our lives, and it is include in different fields such as education, industry and commerce.

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