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It is an increasing trend of businesses to neglect the environment to further their profits. Identify its problems and suggest measures which could be taken to solve these problems.

It is an increasing trend of businesses to neglect the environment to further their profits. Identify its problems and suggest measures which could be taken to solve these problems. PEOQg
It is true that more and more manufactures and plants ignore being environmentally aware to make more money. This essay will first suggest that the main causes of this problem are evil companies damage natural and environment, use amount of those hazardous chemical and then argue that the evil corporations should have been responsible for their damage and the government advisable to improve awareness of people about issues of environment. First of all, evil businesses exploit natural resources and pollute the environment, placing economic burdens on the government and discouraging environmentally clean companies. The costs of restoring the environment when companies do not adopt sustainable approaches often have to come out of taxes. The national economy is halted. Green companies may feel offended and discouraged since their clean and hard-earned tax money should have been allocated for improving the environment instead. Another reason is that profit-making companies are on a march of adopting intensive farming and manufacturing for maximum output which involves chemicals and pesticides. The use of these substances causes water pollution and soil degradation, leading to the spread of diseases transmitted to humans through infected water, meat or vegetables. Moreover, soil degradation means the growth of organic food becomes increasingly challenging, resulting in the prohibitive prices of these products. As a result, customers have to either spend a large amount of their salary/income on these sustainably harvested products or use infected products as the last resort. Their health and living conditions are adversely affected. However, there are several practical ways to address this problem. One of the ways to address these perennial issues, the government should impose/enforce strict regulation on businesses which forces them to pay for cleaning up the environment and change their policies. The evil company must be held accountable for their destructive behavior and minimize their negative impact on the environment. On top of that, law-abiding companies should be rewarded with valuable contracts, incentives and tax breaks for their environmentally friendly practices. Encourage more corporations to go in a more environmentally friendly direction. Secondly, another way the government should raise people’s awareness of the environmental issue as it is closely related to their well-being. When people know the harmful effects of contaminated products on their health, they would protest and boycott products in favor of more sustainably harvested products. Public pressure has the power to make destructive policies unprofitable and illegal, and to make sustainable environmental policies profitable. In VietNam, many companies discharge waste into the environment like Vedan Vietnam leads to polluted water and they were administratively sanctioned. While this trend exerts certain negatives on the national economy and green businesses, and people’s welfare, it can be tackled by effective government regulations and public pressure on destructive companies. In conclusion, it is clear that there are many risks posed by businesses which ignore their environmental influences to further their profits such as exploiting natural resources and polluting the environment. To offset these impacts, many measures should be soon adopted by encourage more corporations to go in a more environmentally friendly direction and the government should raise people’s awareness of the environmental issue
It is true that more and more manufactures and plants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
being
environmentally
aware to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more money. This essay will
first
suggest that the main causes of this problem are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
evil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
damage natural and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
amount of those hazardous chemical and then argue that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
evil
corporations should have been responsible for their damage and the
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government
advisable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
awareness of
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people
about
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issues
of environment.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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evil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
exploit natural resources and pollute the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, placing economic burdens on the
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government
and discouraging
environmentally
clean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
. The costs of restoring the
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environment
when
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companies
do not adopt sustainable approaches
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often
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
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come
out of taxes. The national economy
is halted
. Green
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companies
may feel offended and discouraged since their clean and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-earned tax money should have
been allocated
for improving the
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environment
instead
. Another reason is that profit-making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
are on a march of adopting intensive farming and manufacturing for maximum output which involves chemicals and pesticides. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of these substances causes water pollution and soil degradation, leading to the spread of diseases transmitted to humans through infected water, meat or vegetables.
Moreover
, soil degradation means the growth of organic food becomes
increasingly
challenging, resulting in the prohibitive prices of these
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products
.
As a result
, customers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
either spend a large amount of their salary/income on these
sustainably
harvested
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products
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
infected
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products
as the last resort. Their health and living conditions are
adversely
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affected
.

However
, there are several practical ways to address this problem. One of the ways to address these perennial
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issues
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should impose/enforce strict regulation on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
which forces them to pay for cleaning up the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their policies. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
evil
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company
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be held
accountable for their destructive behavior and minimize their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the
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environment
.
On top of that
, law-abiding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
should
be rewarded
with valuable contracts, incentives and tax breaks for their
environmentally
friendly practices. Encourage more corporations to go in a more
environmentally
friendly direction.
Secondly
, another way the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
awareness of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
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issue
as it is
closely
related to their well-being. When
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people
know the harmful effects of contaminated
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products
on their health, they would protest and boycott
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
in favor of more
sustainably
harvested
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
. Public pressure has the power to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
destructive policies unprofitable and illegal, and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sustainable
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environmental
policies profitable. In
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VietNam
,
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many
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companies
discharge waste into the
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environment
like
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Vedan
Vietnam leads to polluted
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
water and
they were
administratively
sanctioned. While this trend exerts certain negatives on the national economy and green
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businesses
, and
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people’s
welfare, it can
be tackled
by effective
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government
regulations and public pressure on destructive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that there are
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many
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risks
posed by
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businesses
which
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ignore
their
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environmental
influences to
further
their profits such as exploiting natural resources and polluting the
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environment
. To offset these impacts,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
measures should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
adopted by encourage more corporations to go in a more
environmentally
friendly direction and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
awareness of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
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issue
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IELTS essay It is an increasing trend of businesses to neglect the environment to further their profits. Identify its problems and suggest measures which could be taken to solve these problems.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
517 words
5.5
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