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It has become increasingly popular for people to eat pre-prepared food either out or at home. What are the advantages of eating in this way? What problems can it cause?

It has become increasingly popular for people to eat pre-prepared food either out or at home. What are the advantages of eating in this way? What problems can it cause? BJbdm
Over the last few years, eating pre-cooked or fast food has become increasingly common. The question is, is this actually a good idea? On the one hand, there are several reasons why we choose to eat pre-packaged and junk food. First and foremost, it is undeniably convenient. As time becomes ever more precious, we are prepared to sacrifice other things for more. Take for example the busy parent. Arriving at home after 8 or 9 hours of work after picking up children, cooking is suddenly an awful prospect. Who can deny the attraction of microwaving a pizza and calling it “dinner”? Secondly, fast food usually tastes incredible. Food companies spend millions on researching the perfect combination of chemicals, salts and flavours that make us want to consume their products. On the other hand, it can cause some problems too. The biggest issue is that consuming large amounts of pre-made food means that people are not consuming sufficient fruit, vegetables and other good foods. In addition, it typically leads to excessive sugar, fat, and salt consumption. Both of these impact our health in negative ways. A secondary concern is that cooking less, which is the natural result of the above habit, results in people forgetting how to cook, and therefore how to make good food choices. If this is what the parents do, their children will have even worse eating and dietary habits, which probably will lead to various long term health problems such as Type 2 diabetes, high blood pressure, and even heart attacks. In conclusion, although eating pre-made or instant food can be detrimental to your health, it is an understandable choice. Therefore, I believe that eating pre-prepared food is totally acceptable as long as it is done in moderation and people maintain healthy cooking and eating habits.
Over the last few years,
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eating
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pre-cooked
or
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fast
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food
has become
increasingly
common. The

question is, is this actually a
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good
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idea
?

On the one hand, there are several reasons why we choose to eat
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pre-packaged
and junk food.

First
and foremost, it is
undeniably
convenient. As time becomes ever more precious, we
are prepared
to sacrifice other things for more. Take
for example
the busy parent. Arriving at home

after 8 or 9 hours of work after picking up children, cooking is
suddenly
an awful prospect. Who

can deny the attraction of microwaving a pizza and calling it “dinner”?
Secondly
,
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fast
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food
usually


tastes incredible.
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Food
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companies
spend millions on researching the perfect combination of

chemicals, salts and
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flavours
that
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make
us want to consume their products.

On the other hand
, it can cause
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some
problems too. The biggest issue is that consuming large

amounts of
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pre-made
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food
means that
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people
are not consuming sufficient fruit, vegetables and

other
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good
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foods
.
In addition
, it
typically
leads to excessive sugar,
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fat
, and salt consumption. Both

of these impact our health in
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negative
ways. A secondary concern is that cooking less, which is

the natural result of the above habit, results in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
forgetting how to cook, and
therefore
how

to
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make
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good
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food
choices. If this is what the parents do, their children will have even worse

eating and dietary habits, which
probably
will lead to various long term health problems such as

Type 2 diabetes, high blood pressure, and even heart attacks.

In conclusion
, although
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eating
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pre-made
or instant
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food
can be detrimental to your health, it is an

understandable choice.
Therefore
, I believe that
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eating
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pre-prepared
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food
is
totally
acceptable as

long as it
is done
in moderation and
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people
maintain healthy cooking and
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eating
habits.
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IELTS essay It has become increasingly popular for people to eat pre-prepared food either out or at home. What are the advantages of eating in this way? What problems can it cause?

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