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Is connecting well important for the teachers or knowledge?

Is connecting well important for the teachers or knowledge? AjQ3n
Teachers are considered as architecture in the building of a strong nation. The greatness of their role relies in sharing the acquired knowledge with pupils, which will be partial if they are not connected well with the students. Although many persons may posit that vast knowledge is the most important asset for a teacher. Generally speaking, I utterly agree with the opinion that teacher’s skill to relate well with pupils is more important than their wide knowledge over the subject. First of all, the main job of the educator is to educate their students which mean clarifying their doubts about the subjects and making it easier to learn for them. If a teacher has extensive knowledge about his subject but he doesn’t understand his students’ difficulties than what is the use of his great command over subject or the research or publications he got? It’s like a salty ocean, full of water but not potable. In addition, relating well with students can eliminate subject’s fear from students mind and learning can be a fun. I remember, during my graduation our chemistry teacher was able to read our faces, she use to make jokes about the chemical equations to cheer up the students who were going through some tough phases and we always enjoyed her class. All in all, when teachers and students are well connected they will do great in the subject which not only improves their grades but also maintains schools reputation of a pioneer institute which has got some brilliant students. These students only create history in near future by trying impossible tasks which no one dares since they have faith of the teacher and teacher gives them full support in thinking out of the box. By the way of conclusion, based on the above mentioned arguments I am inclined to say that if a teacher is not connected well with her students, he is just wasting his great knowledge because in absence of connection students will not show their full capability
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Teachers
are considered
as architecture in the building of a strong nation. The greatness of their role
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relies
in sharing the acquired
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knowledge
with pupils, which will be partial if they are not connected
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well
with the
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students
. Although
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many
persons may posit that vast
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knowledge
is the most
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important
asset for a
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teacher
.
Generally
speaking, I
utterly
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agree
with the opinion that
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teacher’s
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skill
to relate
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well
with pupils is more
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important
than their wide
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knowledge
over the subject.

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First of all
, the main job of the educator is to educate their
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students
which mean clarifying their doubts about the
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subjects
and making it easier to learn for them. If a
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teacher
has extensive
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knowledge
about his
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subject
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but
he doesn’t understand his
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students’
difficulties than what is the
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use
of his great command over
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subject
or the research or publications he
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got
? It’s like a salty ocean, full of water
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but
not potable.

In addition
, relating
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well
with
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students
can eliminate
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subject’s
fear from
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students
mind and learning can be a fun. I remember, during my graduation our chemistry
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teacher
was able to read our faces, she
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use to
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make
jokes about the chemical equations to cheer up the
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students
who were going through
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some
tough
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phases and
we always enjoyed her
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class
.

All in all, when
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teachers
and
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students
are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well connected
they will do great in the
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subject
which not
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only
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improves
their grades
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but
also
maintains schools reputation of a pioneer institute which has
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got
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some
brilliant
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students
. These
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students
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only
create history in near future by trying impossible tasks which no one dares since they have faith of the
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teacher
and
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teacher
gives them full support in thinking out of the box.

By the way of conclusion, based on the above mentioned arguments I
am inclined
to say that if a
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teacher
is not connected
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well
with her
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students
, he is
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just
wasting his great
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knowledge
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because
in absence of connection
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students
will not
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show
their full capability

IELTS essay Is connecting well important for the teachers or knowledge?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
333 words
5.0
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