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INVENTORS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT TO SOCIETY AS DOCTORS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT? v.6

INVENTORS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT TO SOCIETY AS DOCTORS. v. 6
Doctors are considered as a fundamental pillar in saving mankind. However, modern innovations do help them in serving their duties. It is believed that doctors are a vital part of the society as compared to scientists. In my opinion, I disagree and believe that both play an important factor in the betterment of the society. As the technology is advancing, we have come across numerous innovations in health sector. This means lifesaving has become easier with the help of modern solutions provided by scientists. For example, nowadays, with the help of updated equipment diagnosing a disease has become much easier. Furthermore, the mankind is facing new diseases. This means traditional medicines do not work against them. Doctors with the help of inventors are trying to overcome those diseases. For instance, medical innovators are working on new vaccines to counter different types of flu. There is an immense increase in modern technology, consequently making life simple. To illustrate, a person can get his/her diagnostic reports quickly and in a timely manner with the help of modern innovations. In addition, the new technology has helped doctors in treating patients in a number of ways. For example, online clinics have been established to avoid the hustle of waiting in long ques and coming physically to the clinics. To conclude, doctors along with inventors should work together for the betterment of the people. A society will grow and prosper if the health sector is equipped with the latest technology. This can only be done in the presence of scientists. I believe inventors and doctors both have their own importance in a society.
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Doctors
are considered
as a fundamental pillar in saving mankind.
However
,
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modern
innovations do
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help
them in serving their duties. It
is believed
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
are a vital part of the society as compared to scientists. In my opinion, I disagree and believe that both play an
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important
factor in the betterment of the society.

As the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is advancing, we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
across numerous innovations in health sector. This means lifesaving has become easier with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
solutions provided by scientists.
For example
, nowadays, with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
of updated equipment diagnosing a disease has become much easier.
Furthermore
, the mankind is facing new diseases. This means traditional medicines do not work against them.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Doctors
with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
of inventors are trying to overcome those diseases.
For instance
, medical innovators are working on new vaccines to counter
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of flu.

There is an immense increase in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
,
consequently
making life simple. To illustrate, a person can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
his/her diagnostic reports
quickly
and in a timely manner with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
innovations.
In addition
, the new
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technology
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
in treating patients in a number of ways.
For example
, online clinics have
been established
to avoid the hustle of waiting in long ques and coming
physically
to the clinics.

To conclude
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
along with inventors should work together for the betterment of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. A society will grow and prosper if the health sector
is equipped
with the latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. This can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be done
in the presence of scientists. I believe inventors and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
both have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
importance in a society.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay INVENTORS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT TO SOCIETY AS DOCTORS. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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