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Introduce yourself and dream

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my name is Chau this year i am 12 years old i my date of birth is december 14 this year i am in 8th grade and am currently studying in town junior high 2 my hobby is eating food Korean food and fruit is cantaloupe kiwi watermelon mango junk food is my favorite first and mixed rice paper and milk tea my house consists of three people and a dog the first person is my father send the second become my mother and finally my dog ​​my dog ​​is called belle this year it is 1 year old it has brown color and yellow dots it is a sausage dog it has been with me for a year so I am very happy Dear, my family is currently in my Cu Chi, I have a very good noodle dish, but I don't eat it from time to time because I rarely go out and I am currently translating. I don't dare to go out to the street to buy things, so I can't eat a lot of food coming up, so when it's my birthday, I'll treat it to my grandmother's house at my grandmother's house with a lot of people besides I'm also very good when I go out, I can eat a lot of this song, but I think it will be above average and have a good grade
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Korean
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and fruit is cantaloupe kiwi watermelon mango junk
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belle this
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it has brown color and yellow dots it is a sausage
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happy Dear, my family is
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IELTS essay Introduce yourself and dream

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
231 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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