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International Sports Event

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Sports event has a charismatic feel to it where people come together and cheer the persons that undertake this event. It has many types of games and it is a must that every student does participate in these events. International sports events are ones where the whole world comes together and view the team or the players based on the event at hand. To have an International sports event in a country is really good since it brings exposure to that country and makes it popular. Also tourism to these sporting events from foreigners boosts the financial growth and thus it is good business growing the economy. The city is filled with glamour and enjoyment and it is a thrill to be in such a place because international sporting events are not common and happen only once in a while. The negative outcomes of these events is that work and studies are reduced and people will look for more enjoyment. It will be a joyous moment for all and thus the necessary things that needs to happen in that country will be hindered and put after the sporting event is over. Also there is lot of money that needs to be paid in order to watch these kinds of events which might not be purposeful to many. Too much of anything is good for nothing. Once in a while if we have International sporting events it might be good to have a rejoice. These kinds of events should be kept mainly in the holiday dates.
Sports
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event
has a charismatic feel to it where
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people
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come
together and cheer the persons that undertake this
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event
. It has
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many
types of games and it is a
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must
that every student does participate in these
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events
.
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International
sports
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events
are ones where the whole world
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comes
together and view the team or the players based on the
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event
at hand.

To have an
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International
sports
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event
in a country is
really
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good
since it brings exposure to that country and
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makes
it popular.
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Also
tourism to these sporting
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events
from foreigners boosts the financial growth and
thus
it is
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good
business growing the economy. The city
is filled
with glamour and enjoyment and it is a thrill to be in such a place
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because
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international
sporting
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events
are not common and happen
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only
once in a while.

The
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negative
outcomes of these
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events
is that work and studies are
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reduced
and
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people
will look for more enjoyment. It will be a joyous moment for all and
thus
the necessary things that needs to happen in that country will
be hindered
and put after the sporting
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event
is over.
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Also
there is
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lot of
money that needs to
be paid
in order to
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watch
these kinds of
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events
which might not be purposeful to
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many
.

Too much of anything is
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good
for nothing. Once in a while if we have
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International
sporting
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events
it might be
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good
to have
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a rejoice
. These kinds of
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events
should be
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kept
mainly
in the holiday dates.
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IELTS essay International Sports Event

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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