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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. aWe9
Petrol is one of the highly demanded resources available in the world due to the fact that petrol is become people basic necessity to facilitate people's mobility. Petrol comes from fossils, which means it is a limited source. Petrol prices in every country are different. Middle East countries set the petrol price much cheaper than countries in America. It is because the supply of petrol in America is significantly below than Middle East. With a number of demand come from consumer, Inadvertently it also increase advantages and disadvantages that will affect people in general. Air pollution will likely to be decreasing because people will choose public transportation over private transportation due to the fact the petrol price is higher. People will save their money for other things that are far more necessary, rather than to buy petrol for their car every week. Furthermore, the number of transportation on the roads will decrease. So, there is no more traffic jam on roads especially in the afternoon. Unfortunately, it also will bring adverses to people especially for middle to lower class society. They will not be able to afford petrol for their vehicle and the existence of their vehicle is crucial for them to fulfill their needs. Therefore, people who feel oppressed will regain their rights by demonstrating. In numerous occasions they disturb other people in the vicinity of the demonstration. In conclusion, increasing the price of petrol is an outstanding move to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. Therefore, the government needs approval from every circles of society. So no one will feel disadvantage by that policy.
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is one of the
highly
demanded resources available in the world due to the fact that
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petrol
is become
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people
basic necessity to facilitate
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people
's mobility.
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Petrol
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comes
from fossils, which means it is a limited source.
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Petrol
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prices
in every country are
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different
. Middle East countries set the
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petrol
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price
much cheaper than countries in America. It is
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because
the supply of
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petrol
in America is
significantly
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below
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than Middle East
. With a number of demand
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come
from consumer,
Inadvertently
it
also
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increase
advantages and disadvantages that will affect
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people
in general
.

Air pollution will likely to be decreasing
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because
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people
will choose public transportation over private transportation due to the fact the
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petrol
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price
is higher.
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People
will save their money for other things that are far more necessary,
rather
than to
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buy
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petrol
for their car every week.
Furthermore
, the number of transportation on the roads will decrease.
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So
, there is no more traffic jam on roads
especially
in the afternoon.

Unfortunately, it
also
will bring
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adverses
to
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people
especially
for middle to lower
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class
society. They will not be able to afford
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petrol
for their vehicle and the existence of their vehicle is crucial for them to fulfill their needs.
Therefore
,
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people
who feel oppressed will regain their rights by demonstrating. In numerous occasions they disturb other
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people
in the vicinity of the demonstration.

In conclusion
, increasing the
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price
of
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petrol
is an outstanding
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move
to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
Therefore
, the
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government
needs approval from every
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circles
of society.
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So
no one will feel disadvantage by that policy.
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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