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In todays era, tv has become a very important part of life as a medium to spread intelligence and social awareness. This is a positive or negative development?

In todays era, tv has become a very important part of life as a medium to spread intelligence and social awareness. This is a positive or negative development? 5bJNN
In this contemporary era, television plays a indispensable role in spreading intelligence and social awareness. Some people think that tv is necessary to spread the awareness while others feel this is creating a adverse impact to the society. In this essay I will outline why this will create a negative development to the community. Televisions are not only throwing awareness to people while media are misleading people by their programs. Indeed, media has influenced people by their favourite persons' interview or their dialogue to repeatedly telecasting those words and influencing people by their actions. Moreover, they are not spreading intelligence although media show only what corporate community think people to see in their local community. In India, for instance, media are not spreading the truth while people are know the truth only by words or any other social media because media are corrupted by big politicians. Therefore, television is not develop any intelligence to people in their society. Another valid reason media is not showing what is happening in international or worldwide to enhance public knowledge while they telecast only what will improve their growth, which episodes create more money that shows only they broadcast repeatedly. They have schedule for news, sitcom, romcom, but they are reluctant to show the original truth of what is happening in the real world. Vijay tv in India, for instance, they just focus on how to develop their growth. However, they are not care for public awareness or ingest good thoughts to people. Clearly, television are not create any awareness to the community. In conclusion, television is the main source of informing awareness to public. In my view, these are corrupted by politicians and business people, so they not broadcasting correct information to the people in their region.
In this contemporary era,
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television
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a
indispensable role in spreading intelligence and social
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awareness
.
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Some
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people
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think
that
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tv
is necessary to spread the
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awareness
while others feel this is creating
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a
adverse impact to the society. In this essay I will outline why this will create a
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negative
development to the community.

Televisions are not
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only
throwing
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awareness
to
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people
while
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media
are misleading
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people
by their programs.
Indeed
,
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media
has influenced
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people
by their
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favourite
persons' interview or their dialogue to
repeatedly
telecasting those words and influencing
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people
by their actions.
Moreover
, they are not spreading intelligence although
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media
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show
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only
what corporate community
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think
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people
to
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see
in their local community. In India,
for instance
,
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media
are not spreading the truth while
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people
are
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know
the truth
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only
by words or any other social
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media
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because
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media
are corrupted
by
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big
politicians.
Therefore
,
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television
is not
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develop
any intelligence to
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people
in their society. Another valid reason
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media
is not showing what is happening in international or worldwide to enhance public knowledge while they telecast
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only
what will
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improve
their growth, which episodes create more money that
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shows
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only
they broadcast
repeatedly
. They have schedule for news, sitcom,
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romcom
,
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but
they are reluctant to
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show
the original truth of what is happening in the real world.
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Vijay tv
in India,
for instance
, they
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just
focus on how to develop their growth.
However
, they are not care for public
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awareness
or ingest
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good
thoughts to
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people
.
Clearly
,
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television
are not
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create
any
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awareness
to the community.
In conclusion
,
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television
is the main source of informing
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awareness
to public. In my view, these
are corrupted
by politicians and business
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people
,
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so
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they not broadcasting
correct information to the
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people
in their region.
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IELTS essay In todays era, tv has become a very important part of life as a medium to spread intelligence and social awareness. This is a positive or negative development?

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