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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. qwpE
In Modern day both parents work to have better financial freedom, It can be a bliss as well sorrow for the growing kids due to the fact that parents can afford excellent education for them on the other hand it can lead to neglect. I totally agree that children needs adequate supervision to stay on right path. With our fast paced life it is very common for both the parents work, It leads to better financial stability, They have more affordability which in turn reflects in choosing a world class education institute. Better education can make their kids well prepared for the future challenges and which can reflect in his personality as well the carrier he choose. Education is expensive and indispensable for kids better life. On the contrary its very common for the children to go through neglect which lead to indulging in bad habits. During early age kids education start from home under parents supervision they learn to love, Care and respect siblings. They get constructive criticism for their wrong doing all this cultivate into good virtues. In the absence of parents supervision kids might end in bad company and hence develop habits like lying or stealing etc. To conclude I totally agree that parents care and supervision of their kids is essential during early age to mentor them for good qualities, To have financial stability in the internet age one parent can work from home and when the kids are lil mature they can resume working full time.
In Modern day both
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work to have
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better
financial freedom, It can be a bliss
as well
sorrow for the growing
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kids
due to the fact that
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parents
can afford excellent
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education
for them
on the other hand
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totally
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agree
that children needs adequate
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supervision
to stay on right path.

With our
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paced life it is
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common for both the
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work, It leads to
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better
financial stability, They have more affordability which in turn reflects in choosing a world
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class
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education
institute.
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Better
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can
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their
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kids
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well prepared
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as well
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choose
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is expensive and indispensable for
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kids
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life.

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common for the children to go through neglect which lead to indulging in
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habits. During early age
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kids
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education
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parents
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they learn to
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, Care and respect siblings. They
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constructive criticism for their
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virtues. In the absence of
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kids
might
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bad
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company
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develop habits like lying or stealing etc.

To conclude
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totally
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that
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care and
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of their
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kids
is essential during early age to mentor them for
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qualities, To have financial stability in the internet age one
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can work from home and when the
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mature they can resume working full time.
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IELTS essay In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.

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