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In this set of materials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by bees in 200 million years ago and brings three different hypotheses to support.

In this set of materials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by bees in 200 million years ago and brings three different hypotheses to support. PVX6w
In this set of materials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by bees in 200 million years ago and brings three different hypotheses to support. However, the lecture finds all the ideas not convincing and believes it is perfectly possible for bees to exist in 200 million years ago and provides some evidence to refute them all. First of all, the author of reading claims that there are no bee's fossil from 200 million years ago and the oldest one is about 100 years ago. In contrast, the lecture argues that it is true that we do not have fossil from that date but maybe there were not any good condition for preserving the fossils on that time. Producing liquid by tree which is resin bring good condition for bee's fossil to preseve and no bee's fossils means no trees that produce that resin and it is not mean no bees on that time. Furthermore, it is mentioned in the reading passage that flowering plants do not exist on that time so we cannot had bee 200 million years ago. On the contrary, the lecture contends that it is possible for bees on that time to feed on pre-flowering plant such as pine tree and there was adaptation for them to feed on them. Finally, the author is of the opinion that the lack of some details of bee's nest is the good reason to say this fossile are not belong to bees. Conversely, the lecture explains that there are chemical evidences that show this fossils had same details with today's nest. In fact, in one experiment proved that chamber fossils have water proofing materials same as todays materials.
In this set of materials, the reading states that there are
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many doubt
about creating discovery structure by bees in 200
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million
years ago and brings three
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different
hypotheses to support.
However
, the
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lecture
finds all the
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ideas
not convincing and believes it is
perfectly
possible for bees to exist in 200
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million
years ago and provides
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some
evidence to refute them all.

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First of all
, the author of reading claims that there are no
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bee
's
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fossil
from 200
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million
years ago and the oldest one is about 100 years ago.
In contrast
, the
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lecture
argues that it is true that we do not have
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fossil
from that date
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but
maybe there were not any
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good
condition for preserving the
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fossils
on that time. Producing liquid by tree which is resin bring
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good
condition for bee's
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fossil
to
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preseve
and no bee's
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fossils
means no trees that produce that resin and it is
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not mean no
bees on that time.

Furthermore
, it
is mentioned
in the reading passage that flowering plants do not exist on that time
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so
we cannot
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had
bee 200
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million
years ago.
On the contrary
, the
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lecture
contends that it is possible for bees on that time to feed on
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pre-flowering
plant such as pine tree and there was adaptation for them to feed on them.

Finally
, the author is of the opinion that the lack of
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some
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details
of bee's nest is the
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good
reason to say this
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fossile
are not
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belong
to bees.
Conversely
, the
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lecture
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explains
that there are chemical evidences that
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show
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this
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fossils
had same
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details
with
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today
's nest. In fact, in one experiment proved that chamber
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fossils
have water proofing materials same as
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todays
materials.
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IELTS essay In this set of materials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by bees in 200 million years ago and brings three different hypotheses to support.

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  American English
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285 words
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