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In this set of materials, the reading states that sailors in Russian submarines hear strange sounds and berings up three different hypotheses to explain the sources of these sounds.

In this set of materials, the reading states that sailors in Russian submarines hear strange sounds and berings up three different hypotheses to explain the sources of these sounds. g58JL
In this set of materials, the reading states that sailors in Russian submarines hear strange sounds and berings up three different hypotheses to explain the sources of these sounds. However, the lecture finds all the ideas not exactly possible and provides some evidence to refute them all. First of all, the author of the passege claims that ocra whales produced these sounds for calling male and female for mating. In contrast, the lecture argues that although this idea is plusible, living the ocra near the surface rejected this idea because submarines were in deeper part of ocean and also, the ocra whales can be detected by sailors. Furthermore, it is mentioned in the reading passage that giant squids are another possible source for these sounds because it is difficult for sonar to find them and they may have the ability to emit sounds. On the contrary, the lecture contends that idea is not true for the following reason. The sailors detect one giant squid in 1960 and report it and the sounds disapear in 1980 while the giant squid continues to live in 1980. So, there is no reason for stoping the sound while giant squids still live in the ocean. Finally, the author is of the opinion that third idea for source of the sound is submarines from other countries because it is difficult to detect other submarines. Conversely, the lecture explains that the sounds always move around and change direction quickly. On the other hand, it is impossible for submarine to change direction too fast.
In this set of materials, the reading states that sailors in Russian
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submarines
hear strange
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sounds
and
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berings
up three
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different
hypotheses to
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explain
the sources of these
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sounds
.
However
, the
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lecture
finds all the
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ideas
not exactly possible and provides
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some
evidence to refute them all.

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, the author of the
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passege
claims that
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ocra
whales produced these
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sounds
for calling male and female for mating.
In contrast
, the
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lecture
argues that although this
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idea
is
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plusible
, living the
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ocra
near the surface rejected this
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idea
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because
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submarines
were in deeper part of ocean and
also
, the
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ocra
whales can
be detected
by sailors.

Furthermore
, it
is mentioned
in the reading passage that
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giant
squids are another possible source for these
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sounds
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because
it is difficult for sonar to find
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them and
they may have the ability to emit
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sounds
.
On the contrary
, the
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lecture
contends that
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idea
is not true for the following reason. The sailors detect one
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giant
squid in 1960 and report it and the
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sounds
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disapear
in 1980 while the
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giant
squid continues to
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live
in 1980.
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So
, there is no reason for
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stoping
the
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sound
while
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giant
squids
still
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live
in the ocean.

Finally
, the author is of the opinion that third
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idea
for source of the
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sound
is
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submarines
from other countries
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because
it is difficult to detect other
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submarines
.
Conversely
, the
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lecture
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explains
that the
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sounds
always
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move
around and
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change
direction
quickly
.
On the other hand
, it is impossible for
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submarine
to
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change
direction too
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fast
.
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IELTS essay In this set of materials, the reading states that sailors in Russian submarines hear strange sounds and berings up three different hypotheses to explain the sources of these sounds.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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