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In this contemporary world, people are more concerned about education in the early child

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In this contemporary world, people are more concerned about education in the early child. As a result, partly of communities believing that children should allow in home until they are 6 or 7 years old and unnecessary for preschool. Personally, I indubitably disagree for various valid reasons, and I will have a disputable discussion related this argument in this essay. Firstly, in the modern life, young parents are extremely busy with ther hectic schedules, therefore the significant probability of parents unable for taking care of their children with adequate time. Moreover, high percentages of parents now are suffer from comprehensive skills for nurturing children since they are vulnerable and unability. As a result, preschools and daycares are perceived a idea place to seen their kids in due to the fact that, staffs and teachers will sufficiency knowledge and effectively function since they are trained to be acquainted with children. On contrast, crisis assert that in the early age children should say at home and playing with parents, in somehow this argument just fix if their parents are not have any hindrance comprises irregulary employed and equipted with full knowledge in rearing children. However, in this busy world, this seen an impossible ideal for all. Conclusion, taking all into consideration, whether children should be at home before 6 or 7 year old or not is still a controversial issue. however, I hold firm believe that children shoud go to childcare centres for better and sustainable development
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, partly of communities believing that
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children
should
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in home until they are 6 or 7 years
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and unnecessary for preschool.
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indubitably
disagree for various valid reasons, and I will have a disputable discussion related this argument in this essay.

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, in the modern life, young
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busy with
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hectic schedules,
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the significant probability of
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unable for taking care of their
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children
with adequate time.
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, high percentages of
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parents
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are
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from comprehensive
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skills
for nurturing
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children
since they are vulnerable and
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unability
.
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, preschools and
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daycares
are perceived
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their kids in due to the fact that, staffs and teachers will sufficiency knowledge and
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function since they
are trained
to
be acquainted
with children.

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children
should say at home and playing with
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, in somehow this argument
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employed and
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equipted
with full knowledge in rearing
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children
.
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, in this busy world, this
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an impossible ideal for all.

Conclusion, taking all into consideration, whether
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children
should be at home
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before
6 or 7 year
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shoud
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for better and sustainable development
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IELTS essay In this contemporary world, people are more concerned about education in the early child

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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