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In these days people are not eating healthy and not exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to stop this behaviour?

In these days people are not eating healthy and not exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to stop this behaviour? Kw3P1
Nowadays, despite of awareness and education many people still lead unhealthy lifestyle and suffer health issues. Majority of people today have poor eating habits and they spend negligible time on exercise. Reasons for such development are discussed further and some solutions to this problem are also provided further. There are various factors that force people to adopt such lifestyle. First of all, twenty four hours working culture of modern world do not allow people to spare time for healthy activities. In present working environment, job is round the clock and may change every now and then. So, people fail to devote same amount of time on such activities of fitness as their schedule may change very often. Adding to it, long working hours force people to consume convenience snacks and packaged items. Another reason for this upcoming trend is the electronic entertainment sources like television, computer, and internet etcetera. With such luxury facilities available people do not prefer to go out for entertainment or peruse sports. However, there are plenty of solutions to mitigate this problem. Firstly, it depends on mentality of people, people must decide to eat healthy and devote time to exercising, and spending time on easy exercise like morning walk can keep people free from many diseases and keep them active throughout the day. Also, government and companies should make it sure that people must spend enough time to exercise by organising sports and other healthy events. The most important is the eating habits and there should be more awareness among society about the value of healthy diet. Consumption of junk and convenience food available is the biggest culprit of downing health, thus avoiding such food and preferring homemade food with more of veggies and fruits can keep health at its peak. To recapitulate, the modern lifestyle is responsible of unhealthy life of people today. So, only conscious efforts can mitigate this problem and improve heath of the today’s society.
Nowadays,
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despite of
awareness and education
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many
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people
still
lead unhealthy lifestyle and suffer health issues. Majority of
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people
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today
have poor eating
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habits and
they spend negligible
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time
on exercise. Reasons for such development
are discussed
further
and
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solutions to this problem are
also
provided
further
.

There are various factors that force
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people
to adopt such lifestyle.
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twenty four
hours working culture of modern world do not
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allow
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people
to spare
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time
for
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healthy
activities. In present working environment, job is round the clock and may
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change
every
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now
and then.
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,
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people
fail to devote same amount of
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time
on such activities of fitness as their schedule may
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change
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very
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. Adding to it, long working hours force
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people
to consume convenience snacks and packaged items. Another reason for this upcoming trend is the electronic entertainment sources like television, computer, and internet etcetera. With such luxury facilities available
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people
do not prefer to go out for entertainment or peruse sports.

However
, there are
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of solutions to mitigate this problem.
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people
,
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people
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must
decide to eat
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healthy
and devote
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time
to exercising, and spending
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time
on easy exercise like morning walk can
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keep
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people
free from
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diseases and
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keep
them active throughout the day.
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should
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it sure that
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enough
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to exercise by
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sports and other
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healthy
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events
. The most
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important
is the eating habits and there should be more awareness among society about the value of
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healthy
diet. Consumption of junk and convenience food available is the biggest culprit of downing health,
thus
avoiding such food and preferring homemade food with more of veggies and fruits can
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keep
health at its peak.

To recapitulate, the modern lifestyle is
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responsible of
unhealthy life of
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people
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today
.
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,
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only
conscious efforts can mitigate this problem and
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improve
heath of the
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today
’s society.
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IELTS essay In these days people are not eating healthy and not exercising regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to stop this behaviour?

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