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In the most societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

In the most societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future? 7aPgb
It is argued that, the duties of parents vary according to their gender in the majority of societies. This essay will discuss the reasons behind this difference and also predict the guardian duties. There are many reasons, why the role of mother and father differs. To begin with, in many communities the financial responsibilities are lies only on the male's shoulder, whereas female parent manages household cores. For example, in India majority of fathers go for job in order to fulfill necessities of thier family members. By contrast, mothers are staying at home and do household cores such as cleaning homes, cooking, washing clothes, and so on. Consequently, father's duty is different becasue of financial burden from mother's duty. Additionally, it is incontrovertible that, breast feeding is only done by female parent as it seems impossbile for fathers. Furthermore, personally, I think that, there are number of changes will be occured in parental role in near future, owing to the, fast paced life and everybody follow hetic schedule nowadays. Firstly, the responsiblities of mother would be dwindle gradually as nowadays the most of the parents hiring a special babysitters, who will take care of their kids. Eventually, the duties such as bathing of child, take them outside the home, so kids may able to get some fresh air, and thses kinds of duties will be subtract from mother's duties in short time. Furthermore, due to advancements in technologies parents have to carefully monitered their offspring, otherwise, children might be get problems pertaining to their helath such as eye weaksight in long run, if they use electronic gadegets beyond the limits. In conclusion, due to financial responsibilities and according to the abilities, specially breast feeding, the role of male and female parents vary. I believed that, the future parental role will be change due to the fact of advanced technology and avaibility of babysitters.
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is argued
that, the
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duties
of
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parents
vary according to their gender in the majority of societies. This essay will discuss the reasons behind this difference and
also
predict the guardian duties.

There are
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many
reasons, why the
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role
of mother and father differs. To
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begin
with, in
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many
communities the financial responsibilities are lies
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only
on the male's shoulder, whereas female
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parent
manages household cores.
For example
, in India majority of fathers go for job in order to fulfill necessities of
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thier
family members. By contrast, mothers are staying at home and do household cores such as cleaning homes, cooking, washing clothes, and
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so
on.
Consequently
, father's
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duty
is
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different
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becasue
of financial burden from mother's
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duty
.
Additionally
, it is incontrovertible that,
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breast feeding
is
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only
done by female
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parent
as it seems
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impossbile
for fathers.

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,
personally
, I
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that, there are number of
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changes
will be
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occured
in parental
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role
in near future, owing to
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the,
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fast
paced life and everybody
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follow
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hetic
schedule nowadays.
Firstly
, the
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responsiblities
of mother would be
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dwindle
gradually
as nowadays the most of the
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parents
hiring a special
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babysitters
, who will take care of their kids.
Eventually
, the
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duties
such as bathing of child, take them outside the home,
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so
kids
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get
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some
fresh air, and
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thses
kinds of
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duties
will be
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subtract
from mother's
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duties
in short time.
Furthermore
, due to advancements in technologies
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parents
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have to
carefully
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monitered
their offspring,
otherwise
, children might be
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get
problems pertaining to their
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helath
such as eye
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weaksight
in long run, if they
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use
electronic
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gadegets
beyond the limits.

In conclusion
, due to financial responsibilities and according to the abilities,
specially
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breast feeding
, the
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role
of male and female
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parents
vary. I believed that, the future parental
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role
will be
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change
due to the fact of advanced technology and
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avaibility
of babysitters.
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IELTS essay In the most societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

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